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Tramp Poet
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0 posted 2004-04-23 12:11 PM



Lifeblood

Razor sharp steel slides into...
bitter taste springs to throat
as blade slides into belly.
“Stupid Warrior, pay attention”
demon cackles, twisting a hole
lifeblood spills to earth.

True, it’s true what they say
about this life’s review
in slow motion, livid color.
She steps forth all “innocent”
harvests “warriors” broken heart
finding it flawed, tis tossed away.


Noble warrior, broken warrior
weeps for those who consume
as demon plunges, laughing.
the “innocent” takes the fall
the “warrior” takes no heart
as...lifeblood spills to earth

~~~She paints herself into
favorite corner,
safe retreat...
drawing her guards,
with lifeblood.~~~


~~~~~~~~~


[This message has been edited by Tramp Poet (04-25-2004 09:49 PM).]

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aujussy wolf
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1 posted 2004-04-23 12:16 PM


there is no escape from what sleeps in your mind , even a blade of blood will not end what you have begun
if suicide has crossed yor mind
let that thought pass right out the window
life is more than you could imagine

vivid poem , dark forum would be better for this

- wolf

Tramp Poet
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2 posted 2004-04-23 03:11 PM


sorry if piece is too obtuse...

is dealing with an "innocent" who uses and hides behind pet demons who do the dirty work.  Also; the destruction of the one assigned to protect...
once realized; hides from the actions in a "corner/sactuary"... and yet is still using  the "warrior".
Never truly realizing the one
utterly destroyed is the "innocent"

lol... all that and a bag of chips!

agreed wolf...tis dark
my apologies
your perception appreciated
cheers!

[This message has been edited by Tramp Poet (04-24-2004 12:21 AM).]

aujussy wolf
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3 posted 2004-04-25 01:51 AM


lol tram thanks for the reply , now it is so clear to me , i am sorry to have not seen the story , it is awesome ...i understand it well now , thanks for the info ,
and the chips lol , i just wanted to make sure you were ok   and as i see it your
doin better than me hahaa
peace brother poet
-wolf

Tramp Poet
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4 posted 2004-04-25 09:51 PM


ok bro
what do you think now the last line has been changed?
does it leave the source of her "ink" up
to the reader?

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