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Tramp Poet
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0 posted 2004-04-14 12:03 PM


choices, again

she is standing just out of reach
feet anchored into the dark rock
she is calling, crying, reaching out.
taken prisoner of the darkness
it swirls about, wrapping, closing
laughing it keeps her rooted, captive.

knowing she is looking at her doom
destruction of own deceived choice
darkness coils about in victory.
all her hopes, dreams and desires
lay as ashes at immobilized feet
stirred slightly with disdain by darkness.

her choice made, she ran away
into the arms of the one who deceived
one who lied, enticed, now kills slowly.
made herself a prisoner of darkness
the light of truth barely discernible
she knows, terribly; what has been done.

reaching out, silently she screams
her eyes filled with dark terror
she realizes, she has acted on lies.
from the pits of hell comes laughter
they come for her, to drag her down
rejected protector weeps in defeat.


~~~~~~


© Copyright 2004 Daniel James Burt - All Rights Reserved
Joyce Johnson
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1 posted 2004-04-14 02:34 PM


very sad and touching.  Joyce
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2 posted 2004-04-14 02:52 PM


Daniel~
This cries with the ache of not being able to help someone whose choices have come back to haunt them~

Poignantly done~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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TheGirlNoOneKnew
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3 posted 2004-04-15 01:30 AM


I loved the ending to this...great work.
junemac
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4 posted 2004-04-15 03:29 AM


Oh how beautifully you pen your words.
This one is a very deep sad tale and you did an amazing job of writing it. I was dragged through the pain of this, and the rejection of the watcher in the last line.
You truly are a poet of class hon.
hugs from june x

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