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IndigoEve
Member

since 2003-01-10

Posts 279
Etched in the illusion of time

0 posted 2004-02-13 10:23 AM

sometimes there is a line in between my fingers, tracing
mysteriously hindered invisibility woven and threaded through
your mistakenly florid gaze, littered with the pains, labors, destruction of
innocence. sometimes I speak to you with eyes, and we invent sensuality
like it comes naturally to us, like chocolate upon heated fingertips, melting
down my wrists and you watch sometimes, the forte of decadence, devour.
sometimes, in the silence of you, I can see how elegant words truly are, if
uttered tongueless and demurely, with an essence of magnitude unlike no other
linguistically rhapsodized presence. sometimes, we are beautiful, sometimes we
stare too deeply, and sometimes
we live.

If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi

[This message has been edited by IndigoEve (02-13-2004 11:25 AM).]

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

1 posted 2004-02-13 12:27 PM

Excellent writing! Exquisite imagery. Grover.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2004-02-13 03:04 PM

IndigoEve~

'we invent sensuality
like it comes naturally to us'

And you write so exquisitely ... that I know it comes easily to you~

Oh ... to be your age again and have the abundance of talent that you possess !!
Don't I wish !!!

Continue to grace the pages with the uniqueness of YOU~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

3 posted 2004-02-14 03:14 PM

sometimes I speak to you with eyes, and we invent sensuality
like it comes naturally to us, like chocolate upon heated fingertips, melting
down my wrists

This is a wonderful write.
In my opinion, (for what it is worth...lol)allowing the words to drift down the page in free verse would have set it off beautifully. Still it's awesome. Chris

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2004-02-21 04:18 PM

(big angel hugs) God Bless You, dearest friend, you hold an innocent sensuality within your heart that your poetry proves that you innovate with your own heart, sweet friend, sometimes indeed there's beauty, but VIVAMOS SIEMPRE, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!