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IndigoEve
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since 2003-01-10
Posts 279
Etched in the illusion of time

0 posted 2003-12-11 04:23 PM


~For a good friend of mine, who looks past my facade and can see who I truly am: a remarkable poet.~

she is alone in the corner of her mind
where it is beautiful, like the dark
spilling over shoulders onto pencil forcing lines
to bleed and encroach upon the perfection of this paper,
shadows falling,
falling,
here.

afraid of the world, she lingers
unable to approach those who she sketches;
faces, thousands of impossibly unreachable dreams
in people.

balancing depth in a valley of shallow water
oh, all throughout the evening she whispers where
no one will hear.

unsuppressed perplexity, soft
and palpable, moves into her soul
and she can feel it,
oh god, how she feels it.

but where are the tears that blot
flawlessness with black ink and indigo freedom?
black only makes her eyes more brown,
hair dipped in a mahogany dream,
to shine.

graphite is too delicate for fervency
as the waves of desperation break over her hands
and it salts the wounds
she carries day after day,
penciled faces stare at her deeper and scrutinize
what a soul means
they define her by ideals and she screams
for her soul reader to come
save me save me save me

dusty nightmares are quelled as understanding is drawn
from silver ashes at her feet.
he brushes the fear from her spirit,
and she can breathe.
he tells her what she needs to hear to stay alive.
can he perceive how exquisitely crafted his skill might be
of reading souls,
with a finger to the page?
illusive simplicity it takes, but he shares with her,
the secrets she keeps
hidden within.

she can't see his eyes, though oh she wants to
read what comprehension he seeks for her to feel.
a careful line is stitched by him, in between the powers
of want and need;
oh yes, she understands,
for he is the one who makes her see.


If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi

[This message has been edited by IndigoEve (12-11-2003 04:25 PM).]

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Wesley the Blue
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since 1999-09-02
Posts 426
Forest Lake, MN, USA
1 posted 2003-12-11 08:48 PM


Very good work here.  Your words have a special way of capturing the emotions and ideas of your poem.

KWM

Life is a path, not a destination.  We travel along it one way or another.  Always going somewhere but never ariving.  Walking the path is always bett

Laicie
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 37
Australia
2 posted 2003-12-12 03:37 AM


I love the way you've captured her feelings and the way they meet. In a lot of poems I've read, they already know each other, but with this one I can feel her trepidation. Wonderful write! And whaddya mean, you're only 15! You're only as young (or old) as the pen you hold!
Hope to see more of your work!

Those who love deeply Never grow old;
They may die of old age,But they die young.

Sir Arthur Wing Pinero

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3 posted 2003-12-12 05:19 PM


Your poems are always captivating!

Betty Lou Hebert

coyote
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since 2001-03-17
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4 posted 2003-12-12 09:27 PM


Excellent written expression, IndigoEve.

You make the words bend and flex to whisper your meaning.

CB 8)

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5 posted 2003-12-13 01:58 PM








(big hugggsssssss) Yay! Lali is just going to love this, sweet friend, you truly are such a remarkable poet and in the many years ahead you will continue to sing with poetry as you already are filled with so much wisdom and voice! (smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

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