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cusick
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0 posted 2003-11-30 03:56 PM



From the depths
I call your name
but the only sound
is the rapid bumping
of my heart shattering the
quiet of my tomb like existence.

Warm in your arms,
shaking away half
forgotten dreams
I glance at your beloved face
as an imperceptive flash,
brighter than any day,
steals away my sight.

Falling, falling, absorbed
in utter despair,
paina mere irritation,
then blackness.

From the depths I call you............

[This message has been edited by Trillium (12-01-2003 09:53 AM).]

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SharaRose
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1 posted 2003-11-30 04:15 PM


Awwww...this is so sad, but sweet that you call out to the one you that seems to make all the bad go away.
Love,
Terri~

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2 posted 2003-11-30 04:34 PM


Great imagery, I do say. But there still seems to be some sort of hope left in your poetry....
junemac
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3 posted 2003-11-30 05:18 PM


this one is very nice. good imagery and flow too.

enjoyed

x june x

Trillium
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4 posted 2003-11-30 07:34 PM


Maggie:  You may want to go to "edit" and change the word "Bepths" in the title of your poem.  I know you meant to type "DEPTHS"  I enjoyed reading it.

Betty Lou Hebert

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5 posted 2003-11-30 10:16 PM


Well done.  Joyce
jaicie114
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6 posted 2003-12-01 01:10 AM


Maggie...

Very nice...but sad.

Thank you.

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

passing shadows
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7 posted 2003-12-01 04:05 AM


gosh...this hurts
cusick
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8 posted 2003-12-01 04:53 AM


Thank you all for replying. I was trying to depict the moment the atom bomb hit. Trillion I looked for the edit button but cat find it. Maggie
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9 posted 2003-12-01 09:51 AM


Maggie:  The "edit" button is in the row right above your poem. Third one in from the left.  Just click on it and it will take you back to your post, so you can make corrections.   No big thing, as everyone enjoyed your poem and knew it was a typo in the title! I changed it for you!

Love
Betty Lou

Betty Lou Hebert

[This message has been edited by Trillium (12-01-2003 09:54 AM).]

cusick
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10 posted 2003-12-01 01:52 PM


Thank you so much Trillion, all the time I have used this forum I could never find it. Maggie
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11 posted 2003-12-01 09:04 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Maggie, I too feel this way ever so much looking back on the atom bomb in history and that is why hopelessly I still cry knowing there are actually many who support war and until we have peace-loving people in our offices that aren't Bush, this history will only repeat itself over and over again! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maggie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

cusick
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12 posted 2003-12-02 04:08 PM


I agree with you entirely Noah. Maggie
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