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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk 
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Fly Sugared crumbs you fed to me Just enough to tempt me with Enough to keep me hungry then Begging to soothe the pain Imprisoned in a cage of trust All built from imagination I handed you the only key Tossing my pride away You never let me fly again Binding my wings with love Freedom was the price i paid Leaving my life behind It grew so cold inside my cage Lonliness a shadow companion Affection starved,my spirit failed Shivering and dying Whistle again your sweet love song Tempting a new lady bird Let her feathers brush you as she flies Learning to love at last |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
This sounds like you are trapped in a marriage that has gron cols. Great read. Maggie |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
June, Well done. Love should not be caged. Love, Joyce |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
This one really does ache. To me, the best advice I can give anyone is to seek inside to see if you can write this even better. A poem is a living thing, as long as the author is also. Poems change and grow as the author does as well. Sparticus Even with insects- |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
junemac; This makes one ache for the person trapped! I hope it isn't you! Trillium Betty Lou Hebert |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
Dear Betty, Sparticus, Joyce and Cusick, thank you for your kind thoughts and comments on this one. I agree with sparticus this one needs a little more work. I tend to work on my poetry when the flow of my muse is broken and i will re think this one soon. hugs june x |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh June, my heart goes out to you, dearest friend, believe you can fly with all your heart and faith will carry you away with its second wind! (sigh) You have the grace, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet June, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Insomniac Cat Member
since 2003-09-23
Posts 69The Land of the Dadaists |
This poem is disturbing to me, which is a good thing, to be moved by the work. It's a sad piece, but brimming with honesty and raw emotion. |
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