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IndigoEve
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0 posted 2003-11-13 08:58 PM


**Welcome to my Matrix Revolutions induced depression, numero dos**

I.
Often, I would lie awake, just staring
at her. She was so beautiful, almost
radiant, amidst that deep façade of
seemingly unbreakable courage. Oh,
but I was the one to break her, find
some way through a shell so hardened
by fearless dignity. A whisper would
unravel her deliberate senses, so
intricate a song we sang; but a song
of names it was. Encompassing the fermata
of her voice with my own...so lyrically profound
a notion is love. Each moment I felt her back
pressed against me, I would sense the weight
of a thousand prophecies amassing in my
mind. Stillness flourished within us. She,
couldn't linger very long, reading my needs like
unwritten poetry on the paper of souls. She knew,
as well as I, that every beginning must have an end.
We felt, we bled together, every elusive second she traced
my subconscious with an invisible finger, leading
me away by a linen thread...to freedom.
She was within me, as I was within her. Now though,
I can faintly taste her ghost, as it murmurs me
into a trinity of emotions: loneliness, love,
and that art of letting go she taught me so well.

Je t'aime Trinity...toujours, Neo

II.
He completed me. Balancing the unbalanced equations
of life and death, somehow. I remember
a time when we had achieved utter equilibrium
in the art of deceiving inevitability. Once,
I lent him my soundless breath; twice,
he gave me life, drawn deep from the wells
of impassioned silence. I spoke to him with my eyes,
and he knew their language fluently. One word
meant everything and nothing at all to us. Love,
what blindness, what beautiful foolery it is,
binding, with a silver chord, two souls together
as one. Bond unbroken by what I'd give,
what I knew I would do for him...die.
To end my very being, I loved, I embodied
his spirit in my own hands.
He knew how to unleash a spell on my tongue,
struck silent without incantation, nor curse.
Of how I shed my fearlessness,
and for one daring shard of eternity, I wanted,
no...I needed to become vulnerable to him.
My weakness, my greatest strength. Oh,
forgive what destiny has given me. She knows
not what she has done. But please, I beg him
to cry for me only in his dreams. I need no
elegy, no wavering requiem of unquenched
pain. I only want him to remember
how much I cherished what we shared.

Je t'aime Neo,...toujours, Trinity




If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi

[This message has been edited by IndigoEve (11-14-2003 08:54 PM).]

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Mistletoe Angel
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1 posted 2003-11-14 04:42 PM




(smiles) Wow, this reads like a round robin love letter reception, dearest friend, I love the way you project both points of view here as truly both had their own enticing philosophy of love to one another, even if the rest of the movie was a flop! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is marvelous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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2 posted 2003-11-14 06:52 PM


IndigoEve~
This is absolutely beautiful~

'I remember
a time when we had achieved utter equilibrium
in the art of deceiving inevitability. Once,
I lent him my soundless breath; twice,
he gave me life, drawn deep from the wells
of impassioned silence. I spoke to him with my eyes,
and he knew their language fluently. One word
meant everything and nothing at all to us'


I am saving this one to sift through the beautiful layers again~

My god you are so talented~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
       noles1@totcon.com   

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3 posted 2003-11-14 10:23 PM


IndigoEve:  Incredibly complex and beautiful!  I am enjoying your poetry very much!

Betty Lou Hebert

Flutterwings
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4 posted 2003-11-14 11:42 PM


Keep that quill to paper young lady... You are indeed going somewhere. One AWESOME work of poetic art. Love and peace, Maggie ((~.~))


Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2003-11-15 01:39 PM


IndigoEve
You are starting your journey with seven league boots. I wish you luck.

Suetang
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6 posted 2003-11-15 05:09 PM


Simply outstanding......an incredible talent.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

kitkat
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7 posted 2003-11-16 11:47 AM


This was exquisite. I so much enjoy reading both sides and sharing of emotion in this piece.

kathy

Life is a story waiting to happen..Go on.... Create, Live and Love

Brad Majors
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8 posted 2003-11-18 12:47 PM


well done
paraboxer
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9 posted 2003-11-18 08:48 PM


Quite good writing of our favorite cinematic couple (the reference to Trinity and Neo a dead giveaway.) Tres Bien, Mon Amie.


Enchantress
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10 posted 2003-11-18 09:46 PM


This is SO beautiful...I am speechless!
Hugs~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

Sparticus
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11 posted 2003-11-19 02:47 PM


Hello Indigo, your poetry is far more advanced than I would normally see in a person just fifteen...my daughter's age.  Excellent write.

My only advice, and it is one that I take myself...read work done by established poets, both living and dead...Pablo Neruda, Sylvia Plath, Yeats, Hafiz, Rumi, Lorca, Adrienne Rich and others.  Many are available at www.poets.org  and keep writing!  Your talent is very promising as well as right now awesome!


Sparticus

IndigoEve
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12 posted 2003-11-20 09:29 PM


Wow, to everybody~thank you very much! I appreciate it a lot

If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi

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13 posted 2006-04-06 12:35 PM


What an incredibly complex and well done poem.  I love the images you squeeze out of words like you have made the words yourself, and perhaps you have.  You are a very talented young poet.  I sure wish you success with this gift.
midnightblues
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14 posted 2006-04-06 09:55 AM


Beautiful

Love,
MiCheLLe

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues

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