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edwreck02
Junior Member

since 2003-08-08

Posts 24
Florida

0 posted 2003-08-08 02:31 PM

Reminissing

IN OUR YOUNG DAYS
YOU WERE ALWAYS BY MY SIDE
WE LAUGHED AND WE CRIED
BUT MY LOVE NEVER DIED
BUT NOW YOU WALK LITTLE PRINCESS
WITH A GREAT DISTANCE
NEVER WOULDA THOUGHT WHAT YOU BROUGHT
WOULD LEAVE ME TODAY REMINISSING
STRAIGHT UP MISSING
ALL THE MOMENTS, COMPONENTS
OF A LIFE ONCE SHARED
ALL THE DESPAIRE I CHOOSE NOT TO BEAR
SO I DELETE WHAT MADE ME COMPLETE

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

1 posted 2003-08-08 05:20 PM

nice poem, but no need to use caps, my poet friend. Welcome to Passion!

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.
~Yesterday insult, today gain.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2003-08-08 06:29 PM

Ed~
Welcome to the Corner Pub of Passions~

An enjoyably tender read~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

3 posted 2003-08-08 11:37 PM

This is a beautiful poem. Please check your e mail for a special message.

Dawn

pegasus111
Member Elite

since 2000-07-27

Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa

4 posted 2003-08-09 06:53 AM

nicely done. welcome to our corner. you might want to read and comment on a few pieces done by our group before you post. just a friendly suggestion...

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

5 posted 2003-08-09 12:58 PM

Very sweet, lovely tribute to things gone by. Very nice Ed. Leaves affectionate feelings.

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

6 posted 2003-08-09 01:06 PM

Welcome to our corner. May I call you Ed? I can't remember that pen name. Your poem is well thought out and cohesive but I can't see past the misspelled words. Why not use the spell checker or dictionary and get off to a good start? Sorry, I guess it's the mother in me. Love, Joyce

edwreck02
Junior Member

since 2003-08-08

Posts 24
Florida

7 posted 2003-08-12 11:02 AM

I very grateful for all the positive comments I have many things inside that I hope I can bring out. I have always enjoyed poetry and I have many that I have written already I hope everyone continues with the replies it really helps....

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