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cusick
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0 posted 2003-08-05 06:09 AM



   DARK JOURNEY

No turning back.
The cage door's closed.
Down we plummet,
faster than my heart beat.

Are we rising?
It's an illusion.
Downwards,
close to hell.

Cage unlocked
we meet our mentor,
urging men to
watch their language.

Under tunnels,
deep dark places.
Shining teeth in
blackened faces.

Tour has ended,
back to daylight.
On a sigh
I breathe amen.

Discarding lamp,
boots and knee pads.
Unique experience but
I'll never go down that again.


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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2003-08-05 09:40 PM


Maggie~
This was so real, I felt my claustrophobia sneaking up on me~

Now THAT's good writing~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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2 posted 2003-08-06 08:23 PM


I thought you were a miner but you say you'll never go down again.  I followed you down and I'll never go there again either.  Good job.  Joyce
gringakiwi
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3 posted 2003-08-07 09:05 AM


I have never been so terrified by reading a poem! yes, I too am claustrophobic.... great job!
cusick
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4 posted 2003-08-08 09:14 AM


Thank you all. This happened a few years ago in one of the deepest pits in Yorkshire UK. Good thing you wern't there, we had to go down on our knees going under very shallow tunnels in boiler suite hard hat and big boot. Maggie
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