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He who talks to the dead
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since 2003-07-08
Posts 30
Newport, United Kingdom

0 posted 2003-07-23 11:21 PM


I remember a time,
Long in the past,
Bounced me on his knee,
Seemed huge and vast,
To a little boy,
He was all that could be,
He was my Grancha,
And that boy was me.

He sang me sad songs,
Happy songs, funny songs too,
Summers for me,
Make me remember him too,
He picked me up,
Stopped me feeling blue,
I thought he was a rock,
And would never ever crumble,
Little did I know,
That life makes us all humble.

I still can't forget,
Having to watch him die,
A man so vital,
Lieing there where I could not go,
I could not reach him,
And still can't now,
I know I have disappointed him,
Wherever he is he knows why.

As I read your words,
They made me think,
Whatever is left,
Of the boy I used to be,
I owe all to him,
He made me feel free,
Now I am shackled,
By all times gone by,
As I remember him sitting here,
All I can do is cry.


© Copyright 2003 Paul Anthony Grycuik - All Rights Reserved
BrokenWingedAngel
Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 60

1 posted 2003-07-23 11:46 PM


Shackles can always be unlocked....

It's a very good poem, and I'm glad you posted it.  Equally glad my words made you think... Granted, I'm sure some of them weren't things you wanted to spend the night contemplating, but such is life

Looking forward to more and more and more

Always,
BWA

I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell.

BrokenWingedAngel
Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 60

2 posted 2003-07-23 11:51 PM


P.S.  I'm sure he's not disappointed, least not over the things you think.  It's suprising what our loved ones really feel when they get around to sharing their feelings.  I'm sure your Grandpa is quite proud and still watching over you.

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As a side note, in the "other" forums we were told not to edit the posts...  It seems to have carried over here.  I should've just edited my first reply :p

Always,
BWA

I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell.

missmisery61
Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 56

3 posted 2003-07-24 11:13 AM


Little did I know,
That life makes us all humble.

So true.  But you know what, you are such a sensitve person.  We've all made mistakes in life and I really don't think you would be a disappointment to him in the least.  I think he would be proud that you turned out to be such a kind heart.  Nice.

So lord I see you grinnin' must be grand always winning....AIC

pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
4 posted 2003-07-25 06:42 AM


never undervalue your worth to another human being. especially those you love and love you. this piece was well done. looking forward to more from you. welcome to our corner...

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost



Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
5 posted 2003-07-25 08:18 AM


This piece was touching and beautifu...

As for Grandpa being disappointed...I am sure he made mistakes in his life...he sees into your heart..where the truth is...and he knows...

Susan C.

2dalimit
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since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228
Mississippi coast
6 posted 2003-07-25 01:54 PM


It’s sad, but, you have some great memories.

Take care,
Melton

Joyce Johnson
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Posts 9912
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7 posted 2003-07-29 07:00 PM


I know your Grandpa is proud of you and understanding.  Welcome.  Joyce
DawnG
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since 2000-06-23
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8 posted 2003-07-30 12:14 PM


Cherish your memories with your grandfather as I am sure he always cherished the time you two spent together.

                           Dawn

He who talks to the dead
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since 2003-07-08
Posts 30
Newport, United Kingdom
9 posted 2003-07-30 06:27 PM


Thanks all for your comments I appreciate them.
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