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TheGoalie
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since 2003-06-15
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Poughkeepsie, Ny/Long Island, Ny

0 posted 2003-07-23 06:15 AM


                      -In One Breath-


Have you ever seen light
Reflected through smoke
As it whispers in the wind?

It's a dance that no one
Knows.  And with one breath
That dance is done forever.

"Ain't Got no quarrels with God, ain't got no time to grow old.  Lord knows I'm weak, won't somebody get me off of this reef"  

© Copyright 2003 Joe - All Rights Reserved
SharaRose
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since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~
1 posted 2003-07-23 12:59 PM


And when the smoke clears you wonder....What? Throw your hands up in the air, still asking "what"? Lot's of time can be spent on the whys, and time, and life is too precious for that. I think there are some things in this life we may never know. We'll find out when we get there.

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2003-07-23 04:38 PM


Goalie~

I have seen the dance of smoke
twirling in the light
A wisp of whispered spirit
as it dances 'cross the night~

Thank you for your 'inspiring' thoughts~
Your write is wistfully lovely~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

TheGoalie
Junior Member
since 2003-06-15
Posts 47
Poughkeepsie, Ny/Long Island, Ny
3 posted 2003-07-23 04:51 PM


Marge-

   In response to my poem, you wrote one of your own that surpassed the original.  

"A wisp of whispered spirit
as it dances 'cross the night~"

Simply marvelous.  You captured the image that affected me so much better than I did.  

"Ain't Got no quarrels with God, ain't got no time to grow old.  Lord knows I'm weak, won't somebody get me off of this reef"  

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