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To a Brother, From a Mother's View
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To a Brother, From a Mother's View |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind 
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To a Brother, From a Mother's View When I questioned you, You shown me fierce fire Of you black shining eyes. Did you know it hurt? Didn't you know each word Are asked out of fear, Are asked out of love, My trembling heart? I didn't mean to doubt Your judegment or Your friends' credibility. All I wanted to know WAs how you were doing, Wanted to be closer To you and gave you a hug. Why didn't you tell me What were in your heart? I was tired of this Gussing game and your stares. What did I do wrong? Was I wrong in wanting To know more? Was I wrong in trying To touch Your heart? What did you want me to Do for you? How would you be pleased To stay home longer? I was desperate, I was hopeless till I had your words That you were not in- astray. Didn't you know, We all wanted to be Supportive Of you? (c)May 11, 2003 Eliza Simmons Eliza Simmons |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Eliza~ Anyone who is a mother, can relate sooooooo closely to what you've said. All we can try to do is LOVE-LOVE_LOVE ... someday, HOPEFULLY 'he' will understand that a Mother's heart NEVER stops trying ... and the tears are forgiven without asking~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
i am a mother of two grown up sons and your words are so accurate. you express perfectly the love and frustration of wanting to do right by your sons and wanting to let them know how much you care and why you need to know them more. excellent thanks for this one. hugs from june x |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
"Didn't you know each word Are asked out of fear, Are asked out of love, My trembling heart?" very good imagery, especially with the entrance, i could really picture it. Its a shame the rest got somewhat lost...its a beautiful poem and the them is very emotional and touching... love, claire xx "more than yesterday, less than tomorrow, i love you" |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Eliza: Good job! It's not easy to write from another persons perspective. Betty Lou Hebert |
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