Letter to my Body (Answer to one of the challenges in Poetry Challenge)

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ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....

0 posted 2003-05-05 07:01 PM

Letter to My Body,

Greetings, O mass of flesh and blood of mine,
I have a bone or two to pick with you.
Now listen quietly, pray do not whine,
There is quite a list of things to get through.

For starters your size is surely too great,
Can’t it all function with slightly less space?
Time to cut down now please, not to inflate,
To allow me to move with style and grace.

And now to the top, move on to the hair,
Must it be at beck and call of the breeze?
I brush it, groom it, I take such good care,
Then step outside and all gone, I mean GEEZ!!!

While we’re at it, the face needs a quick look,
No, it flunks, big zero, too many spots!
Washing and fruit-eating as says my book,
So why are they here these appearance blots?!

All in all, you are a terrible mess,
And yet, I admit, you do serve me well.
You do the job, nothing more, nothing less,
Leaving what’s inside with the tale to tell.

Others may see me and not be impressed,
They have to look deeper, find me inside.
I know in my heart that this is the best,
So I’ll wear this “unique” cover with pride.

So listen here, o great imperfection,
Though I complain at you time and again,
I look on you with lots of affection,
On my page of life, you are not a stain!!

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

JP
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1 posted 2003-05-05 08:46 PM

Well done!

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

Joyce Johnson

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2 posted 2003-05-05 09:58 PM

I haven't seen the challenge, but this is great. Joyce

junemac
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3 posted 2003-05-06 04:45 PM

sure you are not writing to my body ? lol.

i loved this one, well thought out and clever and most of all it made me smile

thanks for sharing this with us.
hugs from june x

aries_luv_ppl
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4 posted 2003-05-06 06:38 PM

nicely done

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....

5 posted 2003-05-06 10:23 PM

Well if I made y'all laugh, that's cool! You know how it is, you look at yourself and you either laugh or cry....might as well laugh huh!!!!

Thanks for the replies,
Liz xxxx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

Street Heart
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6 posted 2003-05-06 11:26 PM

Liz...yes,you made me laugh! Not AT you,
mind you,but just at the cleverness of your wording in reference to the age-old malady of never being quite satisfied with our wickedly frustrating anatomies.Wonderful...
and most certainly one that I am saving for future enjoyment.

Empathetically

,Geoffrey

If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living.

Martin Luther King,Jr. Detroit,1963

wings of the moon
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7 posted 2003-05-07 11:40 AM

lol!
I don't know whether to laugh or go "awwww"...
This is a brilliant and very witty piece of yours, I greatly enjoyed it

cheered up my day immensely

love,
Claire xx

"more than yesterday, less than tomorrow, i love you"

Marge Tindal

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8 posted 2003-05-07 11:40 AM

LilLizzieGal~

'I’ll wear this “unique” cover with pride.'

Ahhhhhh, you forget ... I've SEEN that beautiful smiling face of the loveliest grace~
You are BEAUTIFUL ... and don't go trying to dispute me or I'll just go ahead and post your picture !!!!
(Yes .... I've still got it !)

LOVE YOU~

Oh ... this is cleverly done young lady~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....

9 posted 2003-05-07 04:58 PM

Thanks for your replies everybody, I know I should thank you all individually but I don't want to take up space with nutty ramblings...
Love y'all,
Liz xxx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

passing shadows
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10 posted 2003-05-09 02:06 PM

nice write

Manth88
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11 posted 2003-06-18 03:03 AM

Hey, great write, I hope u do more in the future.

!^*Manth88*^!

midnightblues
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12 posted 2003-06-18 07:54 AM

Hey Lizzie,

this is great! haha really made me rofl

Love
Michelle

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

suthern

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13 posted 2003-06-18 12:57 PM

I enjoyed this very much... think we can all identify with never quite being satisfied. *S*

Trillium

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14 posted 2003-06-18 04:20 PM

ESP: What a clever poem and I really enjoyed reading it. I guess very few of us are satisfied with what we look like! The ones who are satisfied are usually unbearably vain!

Betty Lou Hebert

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