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IcyFlamez89
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since 2003-02-14
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Jersey City NJ

0 posted 2003-04-26 01:52 AM


I dream of them of long ago,
Who kept a secret we didn't know.
The art of love, so long forgotten,
Replaced by lust, so cold and rotten.
The intimate act of consummation
Now taken over by obligation.

Oh I miss the simple brush of lips,
And down below the wrapping hips,
That sway their bodies side to side,
And new sensations open wide
Rising higher, breaths so warm
When the secret act has been performed.

To feel so whole, to feel so free
Your body screams in jubilee
To feel your senses rise in delight
For it felt the arousing flames ignite.
And when you feel it's about to end,
It surprises you and starts again.

Such simplicity is now unseen
For today it's chaotic and so unclean.
It's much too casual in this age
Much too lustful, filled with rage.
So to history lies the secret of
The forgotten art of making love.

....This is bound to be moved aint it? lol...

[This message has been edited by IcyFlamez89 (04-26-2003 02:25 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-04-26 12:57 PM


Funny you posted this just after I watched a special on t.v. last night on the lost art of making love on Bravo, and you couldn't have done this poem with more truth and tenderness.  It is very well done but do me one tiny favor correct this part (To feel wo whole) and it is darn perfect!

         

IcyFlamez89
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since 2003-02-14
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Jersey City NJ
2 posted 2003-04-26 02:27 PM


oops, hehe. Fixed and glad that u thought it wuz a perty gud poem.
wings of the moon
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since 2003-03-27
Posts 323
Pink bubblegum land
3 posted 2003-04-26 04:24 PM


wow this is beautiful...
only you could put it this way!
well done, this is a gorgeous poem, highlighting well how the today's chaos contrasts with such a romantic art...
nicely said!

love,
Claire

"more than yesterday, less than tomorrow, i love you"

IcyFlamez89
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since 2003-02-14
Posts 292
Jersey City NJ
4 posted 2003-04-27 12:18 PM


Thanks. I needed sum encouragement an those comments did the trick
rcl 4eva
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since 2003-04-12
Posts 19

5 posted 2003-04-27 12:34 PM


Wow, I liked the rhythm and the feel of it, and how u didn't go into the "details" but still managed a descriptive poem. Hugz n muahz

[This message has been edited by rcl 4eva (04-27-2003 12:34 AM).]

aries_luv_ppl
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since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448
Universal Mind
6 posted 2003-04-28 02:17 AM


This is great.

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

JP
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Posts 1343
Loomis, CA
7 posted 2003-04-28 11:46 AM


Well done, again.

~quickly becoming your biggest fan~

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junemac
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since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005
uk
8 posted 2003-04-28 07:50 PM


wow !!!!!!! that is just brilliant, you are so talented. unbelievable. do you mind if i join your fan club :0)

thanks i thoroughly enjoyed this.
x june x

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