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Yu Lan
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0 posted 2003-03-02 05:34 PM


Shoes off by the door
and wander sock-footed past
the good-luck dragon
on the wall.
Some luck –
all the money’s gone
and you expect her to pay the bills in salt.
Gamble your house and
gamble your wife,
gamble your daughter
and your twelve year old son.
Tear up their lives
and don't give a damn:
you've a horse to bet on,
a game to play,
dice to roll,
three lives to wreck
and all their friends hearts
to break.
Double or nothing
you'll just roll again
to double your nothing
and triple their pain.

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

© Copyright 2003 Lynne Miura, née Chudley - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-03-02 05:36 PM


Bravo! This is an excellent write and gets my vote to be in the book! Chris

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that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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2 posted 2003-03-02 07:15 PM


Very good poem about the adiction of gambling.Joyce
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3 posted 2003-03-02 07:50 PM


Wow!  Powerful write...gets my vote!

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4 posted 2003-03-02 08:51 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Lynne, this is so very sad but true, sweet friend, it saddens me to see much gluttonous and avarice behavior in the world and how innocent are always hurt and abandoned by the evil of capitalism! (sad sigh) I just wish the whole system could collapse and we can go back to giving and sharing as certainly that isn't any more anarchy to that than keeping this up, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lynne, thank you for sharing, you have my vote!



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Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2003-03-03 01:40 AM


the number strike me

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JamesMichael
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6 posted 2003-03-03 05:53 AM


I knew a man in California that gambled at the horse races and he kept refinancing his house to cover the loses...he finally lost his house and then his wife...of course I also know some men that lost their jobs and then lost their car and then their home and then their wives...James
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7 posted 2003-03-03 09:32 AM


Great! My vote for sure.
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8 posted 2003-03-03 12:27 PM


Well said, with a very apt title, YuLan...
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9 posted 2003-03-03 12:49 PM


Biblical and more than a little annoyed. Gets my vote.
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10 posted 2003-03-03 02:01 PM



An excellent write, thank you for sharing with all of us!

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11 posted 2003-03-03 11:25 PM


welcome back, Lynne!

very cool descriptions here...this write is short but nonetheless i like the lines about the good-luck dragon (probably because i'm Chinese), paying your bills in salt and tripling pain...

good work man!


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12 posted 2003-03-03 11:27 PM


my computer won't let me edit

anyway, just came back to say that i also like the social consciousness so exemplified in this poem..

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13 posted 2003-03-04 08:30 AM


Yu Lan, excellent write! Thanks for sharing.   This one has my vote.

[This message has been edited by CHILI (03-04-2003 08:31 AM).]

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14 posted 2003-03-04 10:31 AM


Thank you for this ~~ gambling can ruin so many lives and you may have helped someone with this wake up call.

Hugs, Marti

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contributes to its power.   
Shirley MacLaine

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15 posted 2003-03-04 12:20 PM


Powerful write... well done! *S*
Yu Lan
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16 posted 2003-03-04 05:55 PM


Wow, thank you all SO MUCH!! I'm overwhelmed - I really appreciate your comments (and votes, for those of you who voted!)

-Lynne

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

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17 posted 2003-03-04 09:29 PM


A powerful write indeed.

Voting!

Maree

Yu Lan
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18 posted 2003-03-05 09:20 PM


Thanks Maree - it's wonderful to be appreciated!

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

[This message has been edited by Yu Lan (03-05-2003 09:20 PM).]

jamesjiao
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19 posted 2003-03-07 01:45 PM


I've read this one, Lynne. A very good write - I hope her father is no longer as bad as you've described in the poem.

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.



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20 posted 2003-03-08 04:04 PM


Loved it!  You could not have picked a better title for this one either.  You certainly get my vote.

           
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Yu Lan
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21 posted 2003-03-09 05:52 PM


Thanks James - well, unfortunately he is.. But it won't affect her all her life.

And thankyou for your nthusiastic comments and vote Mysteria!

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

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22 posted 2003-03-14 04:07 AM


Yu Lan~ A touching poem that is all so true for many people. Lives wasted by gambling, a sad story indeed...Paul

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23 posted 2003-03-14 09:49 AM


I understand this all too well! Thank you for such a honest write.
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24 posted 2003-03-14 01:40 PM


Was wondering where your submission to the book was, Yu Lan.  Glad I found it.  Here's my vote.  
Yu Lan
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25 posted 2003-03-14 06:50 PM


Thanks Paul, Loren and L & P (hehe).

Well, I wasn't sure whether to submit one or not, because this time, I don't think i can afford to buy a copy if it gets voted in, and I do like to have a copy of everything I'm published in.. but I thought I would anyway.. I might be able to find the money somewhere.. work more hours or something! ^^

Thanks guys!

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

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26 posted 2003-03-16 10:18 AM


I'm glad that you decided to submit this one, Lynne. I hope someone who has this terrible addiction will read it and see how it affects their family. You describe this very well.

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

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27 posted 2003-03-17 11:23 AM


This one touches a little close to home. Certainly I must vote on it.

Love reading all these great writes.
I write not!

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28 posted 2003-03-20 12:11 PM


A powerful write!
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29 posted 2003-03-22 02:18 AM


perhaps time to submit another, Lynne?

good luck with the job..i should know..i'm trying my darnest to save up some spare cash for the book as well

Yu Lan
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30 posted 2003-03-25 07:37 PM


Thank you so much - my poem is in!! ^_^

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

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31 posted 2003-04-14 09:14 AM


A perceptive and powerful poetic analysis of the psyche of an addicted gambler and the add-on tragedy that floods the lives of loved ones.

This poem -a very good example of free verse-projects comtinuous frames  of relevant images from beginning to climactic end. Thus, it involves the reader to the extent of awakening or re-awakening consciousness to a greater understanding of  gambling addiction and the destructive effects it has on rational behaviour in all areas of life and living.

Congratulations on an inspired and inspirational piece of writing.  I wholeheartedly vote for its inclusion in the anthology.

Patrick Talty

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32 posted 2003-04-14 12:49 PM


It happens all the time! But who would've thought of that if not for you Lynne!
Excellent write!


Love
Michelle

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Yu Lan
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33 posted 2003-04-15 02:03 AM


Thank you both.. a gambling addiction is a hard thing to watch, and, no doubt, a harder thing to deal with. I wish words could fix all problems like this, but unfortunately, in the end, it is up to the individuals..

Thanks for reading - and appreciating - my poem.

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

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34 posted 2003-04-15 01:34 PM


Yu Lan:  This is an excellent poem about a heartbreaking subject. We lived in Reno, Nevada for many years and saw this exact thing happen over and over to people in the community.  

Betty Lou Hebert

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