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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA 
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The Bitter Season Along Alaska's rugged shore And on a bay that few explore, There stands a rustic lodge, remote And only reached by plane or boat. The winter months find it asleep. Except for two young folk who keep The furnace going and take care Of anything that's needed there. They loved the sea life they would see And eagles perched in each tall tree. All through the season of the snow, They'd don their snowshoes and then go Down to the dock, where kayaks stacked, Reminded them how much they lacked Mobility of movement, so, One sunny day, they thought they'd go Across the bay, to where they knew Another couple wintered too. They took a two-man boat and went. The freedom of this action lent An air of gaiety and they Were singing, laughing, on their way. Half way across, the wind arose. It blew salt spray and soon their clothes Were covered with an icy rime. The waves grew taller in no time And soon their boat was over-turned, But they remembered what they'd learned, And finally made their way to land. The woman was too weak to stand. Her husband left her and he ran On clumsy feet to find a man Who'd help him carry her from shore. It was a little while before He and the people from the inn Returned and found, to deep chagrin, The sudden storm that felled his wife, Had also stolen her young life And carried her into the deep, Where all Poseidon's victim's sleep! Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (02-21-2003 10:34 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Betty, this is very sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to the losses and the families of their loved ones, it can be so rough in the ocean up there and I have heard many stories like this! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Betty, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Noah: Thanks so much for your kind comments. Their story has haunted me since I heard about it last winter and I finally felt I should write about it. I did not know the couple involved, personally, but through a neighbor. Very tragic! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Oh I was so hoping for a happy ending. You did a good job Betty. Joyce |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
A sad story well told! Enjoyed.  |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Wow! My vote for sure, glad I had a tissue handy. |
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cupcake Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 116 |
Sad! But beautifully written. I'm a reader - not a writer. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Joyce: Thanks for reading. It is very tragic and it happened last winter to people a neighbor knows. It has been preying on my mind so I needed to write about it. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Poet de Vine: Thanks for reading and commenting. Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (02-22-2003 12:52 PM).] |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
SPIRIT: Nice to hear from you and sorry it's a sad story, but it happened! Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (02-22-2003 12:53 PM).] |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
cupcake: I appreciate your comments. Thanks. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
though sad, this is very well written work... regards, sudhir |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this gets my vote |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Sudhir; Thanks for commenting. It is a sad story, I know, and though I didn't know this couple personally, I felt moved to tell what happened to them. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
passing shadow: Thanks for reading and also for your vote. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very tragic and very well done poem about it, Betty Lou. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Such a tragic story but so well told. ~hugs and a vote!~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BettyLou~ You tell a poetic-tale so vividly beautiful as to bring tears to the eye~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Denise: Thanks for reading and appreciate your comments. I seldom write really sad poems, but their story touched my heart and I felt compelled to write about it. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Enchantress: Thank you so much for the vote and for taking time to read this poem. I appreciate it. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Marge: Always so good to hear from you! Thanks for reading and appreciate your lovely comments. Love Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Beautiful. Reads like the prologue to an epic-length work. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
bsquirrel: Thanks. It could be enlarged on that's for sure! There is more to tell. Betty Lou Hebert |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
At first I was thinking "Walt Whitman" then I thought "how sweetly tragic" Very, very good work. Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
JP: Thank you for all your comments. I appreciate the response. Betty Lou Hebert |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
beautifully composed dear lady. A sad event but so typical of the uncertainty of life. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
pegasus: Thank you so much for your comments. It is typical of life, as you point out. It only takes a second for everything to change! Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (03-06-2003 02:58 PM).] |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
A bitter season indeed. A very tragic tale, but very well written and kept my attention all the way through. You do know how to tell a story even though this is based on true life as you stated above. Glad that I found and that I am able to vote for your poem. God bless. -Bob |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Bob: Thank you for your vote and also for your understanding. I appreciate both! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
What a wonderfully told story, and I will vote but wanted to tell you just how much I appreciate all your work. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Mysteria: Thank you for the lovely compliment. I appreciate it even more than the vote. Betty Lou Hebert |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
My vote's in  May I say, you write beautifully |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
hoot_owl: Thank you for the lovely compliment! I appreciate hearing from you. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
hoot_owl: Thank you for the lovely compliment! I appreciate hearing from you. Betty Lou Hebert |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
A really wonderful write. Enjoyed the read. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
WhiteRose: Thanks for your nice comments. Betty Lou Hebert |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautifully told story! *S* I, too, was hoping for a happy ending... only to be reminded that many aren't. *S* |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Suthern: Thanks for commenting. I wish it had been a happy ending too, but since it is true, i had to write it as it happened. Betty Lou Hebert |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
That's is sad but beautiful. You know I hate reading...esp long one...but I'm glad I pay a visit to your poem today. Eliza Simmons |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Eliza: I know you hate reading and you made a noble effort to read all of this poem! Thank you and especially appreciate hearing from you! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
Not all stories end happily but nevertheless they need telling to. You did an excellent job here. I cried. The fact that this story has its roots in truth beg even more for its telling. You have my vote! Sherry Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today. |
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Wesley the Blue Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 426Forest Lake, MN, USA |
This is a turely beautiful poem. I very much enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing with us. "The usefulness of a cup is in its emptiness, for a cup that is full can hold no more." |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
I should have known from the title that this poem did not end well. I was hoping it would. You wrote so perfectly. You captured the essence of their love, and gave hope all the way to the end. A great story, but a sad one, too. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Sherry: I cried when I heard this story from a neighbor who knew the people involved. It has preyed on my mind for a year and I finally had to write about it. Thanks for your caring response. Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (03-31-2003 03:42 PM).] |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Wesley: Thank you for reading and I appreciate your comments. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
LngJhnAg: I wish this story could have had a happy ending too!! When you are writing about reality, it often doesn't. appreciate your comments. Thanks. Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (03-31-2003 03:46 PM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Very sad but well told. Maree |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Maree: Thanks for reading and commenting. It is sad, but I really wanted to tell the story. Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (03-31-2003 11:20 PM).] |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
 Just in here |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
SPIRIT: Thanks for the "bump!" Betty Lou Hebert |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
why has this not been voted for the book yet? such a great write! i really likedhow you told this story, both haunting and sad and you set the mood with such intense feeling! take care. amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
oops forgot to vote "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Aimster: Thank you so much for your nice remarks and also for your vote! I appreciate both. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am locating the ones I hadn't yet voted for.... 'bout time, don't you think?  |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Sunshine: Always nice to hear from you. Thanks for reading. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I can recall hearing a story such as this more than once while living in Alaska, where the sea often takes her bounty from the people, even as we take ours from the sea. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Midnitesun: Thanks so much for commenting. Alaska is a rugged country and requires much of those who live there, I think. But, it's so beautiful and majestic, it's worth it. I only lived there for a year, but I dream of going back some day to see more of the state and it's people. Betty Lou Hebert |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow~ |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Thoroughly enjoyed! Very tragic, though... Love Michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
oh wow, very sad and very well told. i enjoyed this so much and it really touched my heart. june x |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Passing Shadows: Thanks for reading and appreciate your comment. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Michelle: Thanks for commenting. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
junemac: Thanks for reading. I'm glad that the poem "spoke" to you! It is a sad story, more so, because it really happened. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
junemac: Thanks for reading. I'm glad that the poem "spoke" to you! It is a sad story, more so, because it really happened. Betty Lou Hebert |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
terrifect write!!! It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
QJQ: Thank you for your nice remark! Betty Lou Hebert |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
passing shadows: Thanks for bumping this one. I'm glad you thought it worthy! Betty Lou Hebert |
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