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jjote
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0 posted 2003-01-18 10:23 PM


This is my perfect escape-
to sit vigil at water's edge,
its serenity exploding into lush green.

With nature's mood so quiet,
and the sky a palest blue,
translucent as polished glass,
my mind stops - intoxicated.

A haunting stillness seduces me
into new levels of invasive splendor,
captivating my senses

The world, or this timeless piece of it,
seems a good and gentle place.


(free verse anyone? sorry, I've got no meter or rhyme today up my sleeve.)

[This message has been edited by jjote (01-19-2003 08:38 PM).]

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Joyce Johnson
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1 posted 2003-01-18 11:12 PM


I think this is lvoely imaginative verse.  Joyce
Denise
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2 posted 2003-01-19 12:26 PM


jjote, this is beautiful free verse! Very well done!
SPIRIT
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3 posted 2003-01-19 12:10 PM


Works for me, I don't have a clue about meter and all that stuff. Really nice and love this bit
'A haunting stillness seduces me
into new levels of invasive splendor,
captivating my senses.'

DawnG
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4 posted 2003-01-19 02:09 PM


Jjote,

This poem is beautiful. No form or rhyme needed here

                      Dawn

jjote
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5 posted 2003-01-19 08:43 PM


Thanks all - you inspire me to remain a "free spirit" - rhymes and meters only for those rainy days when I won't be able to get out.
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