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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2003-01-10 08:30 PM


I was painting yet another picture,
Not with water but with bubbles of words.
I'm in my own little world once again.
My world isn't huge but always try to
Think of getting more juice for the fountain.

Here we go, a day under Hawaii's sunshine
Drinking specialty juice under big leaves.
I took a picture and I see
All color of rainbow and friuts.
Strawberry, raspberry, melon, grapes,
Banana, apple, orange and mango.
Grapefruit of all kinds, and nuts of all sizes,
What's a brunch we have!

All of a sudden the blue sky becomes grey
Big storm of emptiness blows away all things.
It polluted the fountain of juice.
Photos lost its colors,
Even fruits lost their fresh color too,
Everything becomes dim as the sunset turns the light low.
No one ever drinks again.

Maybe I am not praying...but I know...
You are always listening...to my soul...

© Copyright 2003 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
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Member Patricius
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1 posted 2003-01-10 08:33 PM


I am not quite sure of what you are trying to say with this poem - but I sure could drown in the scent of all of those delicious fruits. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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2 posted 2003-01-10 09:38 PM


Dear Eliza.  I like that phrase "Bubbles of Words"  Made me laugh.  I am not sure what you are saying either but you were leading me somewhere with your description of Hawaian Fruits.  Love, Joyce
aries_luv_ppl
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3 posted 2003-01-11 02:13 PM


I'm saying my creativity juice run out of things to say...and that emptiness fill the place of my heart......

Guess this isn't a good write ay..

Maybe I am not praying...but I know...
You are always listening...to my soul...

midnightblues
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4 posted 2003-01-11 04:03 PM


Dear Eliza,

I like to think that you painted a happy gathering scene and the storm dampened your moods... though that might not be what you've intended to portray! nevertheless I love the description and the realism...


Love
Michelle

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

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