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Yu Lan
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0 posted 2002-12-10 01:15 AM



You Decide, I Drive...

I’m aching to hear you –
(‘Where do you want to go?
You decide, I drive...’)
but I’m squashed here in the library;
head in my hand
and I’m so lonely,
scribbling your name on the wall.

I need to fall into your eyes –
with the way you look at me
you can persuade me I’m special.
I want your gentle hands
holding mine, holding me –
the love in your touch lets me bloom,
takes my breath
makes me miss you...
‘Where do you want to go?’
Anywhere with you.

It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.

© Copyright 2002 Lynne Miura, née Chudley - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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1 posted 2002-12-10 03:40 PM


I love the way this poem made me feel ....

it's beautiful.

Maree

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2002-12-10 04:25 PM


YuLan~

'I need to fall into your eyes –'

LOVE THAT THOUGHT~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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bsquirrel
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3 posted 2002-12-10 04:53 PM


Sweet little love poem, here. I like "you can persuade me I’m special" -- it gives a bit of emptiness and need to the proceedings, which adds depth (and a bit of sadness).

Or maybe I read these things too deeply.

Lonestar
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since 2002-12-04
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Glasgow, Scotland
4 posted 2002-12-10 06:04 PM


Loved the poem, felt like I could relate to it.  Thanks for the great read, and ur encouragement on my posts.

Lonestar

midnightblues
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5 posted 2002-12-11 05:38 AM


Dearest Lynne,

I like this! Very much like me... I'll rather believe sweet words though I feel otherwise! And coz of that I'll go anywhere...

Love
Michelle

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

Joyce Johnson
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6 posted 2002-12-13 03:35 PM


"Anywhere with you."  Truly loving.  Joyce
Aenimal
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7 posted 2002-12-14 01:29 AM


beautiful and hearfelt thanks for sharing
Yu Lan
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8 posted 2002-12-16 02:37 AM


Thank you all so much!!
bsquirrel, no, you didn't read too much into it.. that's actually the whole point o that line.. I guess it's as Michelle said, about believing sweet words although feeling otherwise.. I really do believe him, and he makes me feel something I would never have dreamed was possible because I always thought I wasn't good enough for anything.

Thank you for your generous replies
Love y'all
-Lynne

It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
9 posted 2002-12-29 03:45 PM



Lynne~
Oh...I just love this write.
So softly and tenderly penned,
and the last lines are perfect.
Such a lovely feel this has.
Beautifully penned.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

aries_luv_ppl
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Universal Mind
10 posted 2002-12-30 01:46 AM


I love the way you word it Sweet poem. Admire much.

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

LADY_DEATH
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11 posted 2002-12-30 01:23 PM


I love this poem, more people should be as loving and caring as you were in this poem.Good job!


Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
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New Zealand
12 posted 2003-01-01 07:01 PM


Thanks.. This is for Takuya (Though he already knows that!)
Thanks for reading, and thanks for enjoying!! ^_^

Love,
Lynne

It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.

Daniel J D
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Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
13 posted 2003-01-02 12:10 PM


Well written. Nice.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

janmew
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since 2001-10-27
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Canada
14 posted 2003-01-03 10:27 PM


Awwww... this feeling, I know! You wrote this so well, the feeling came through perfectly.

Jan

Yu Lan
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15 posted 2003-01-06 12:46 PM


Thanks Jan and Daniel, I appreciate your comments.. ^^

Love ya'll
-Lynne

It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold.

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