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0 posted 2002-12-04 01:36 AM





Snow Falling

The woodland trail is hushed with snow.
The wind blows high above me though,
While here, the earth seems fast asleep
And trees their quiet vigil keep.

What secrets do these dark woods hold?
I flounder on, both wet and cold
And stop to listen to the sound
Of water, gurgling underground.

Now, tired to the very core,
I turn to head for home once more
And savor every silver spray
Of frosty shrubbery on display.

I stop to rest and I can hear
The sound of snow and as I peer
Back the way that I have been,
No sign of footsteps can be seen.

Just standing there, I feel a part
Of all I see and in my heart,
I know this moment is unique.
A winter memory to keep!
,




Betty Lou Hebert


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1 posted 2002-12-04 02:12 AM


This is a beautiful tale of the beauty of snow.  We seldom see it here, but my childhood was spent in North Dakota and we always had our snow in December.  It made everything beautiful.  Joyce
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2 posted 2002-12-04 07:02 AM


A really good poem. I enjoyed this and almost felt like I was there with you. Nice to see a poem that made me smile, Thanx . dx
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3 posted 2002-12-04 10:38 AM


Joyce:  Thanks and I think there is something so special about being in the woods when it's snowing. The sound of it falling is all you can hear.

Betty Lou Hebert

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4 posted 2002-12-04 10:38 AM


cherrylips:  Thank you for commenting and glad it gave you a smile.

Betty Lou Hebert

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5 posted 2002-12-04 11:53 AM


I like how it uses the rhythm of Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening, and I love the imagery.
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6 posted 2002-12-04 06:03 PM


I hadn't thought about the rhyme scheme being the same as Robert Frost's famous poem, but there is a similarity.  Thanks for drawing it to my attention and for commenting.

Betty Lou Hebert

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7 posted 2002-12-05 10:51 PM


Snow is so darned enchanting, isn't it, Betty Lou? But why does it have to be so darned slippery too? Gorgeous poem!
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8 posted 2002-12-06 12:59 PM


Denise:  Thanks for reading.  You're right, snow and ice can create such gorgeous scenes but there is not a whole lot of pleasure in being out in it anymore.  I used to ice skate and ski and never thought much about the environment, because I was having fun!  Now that I am older, I am more concerned with comfort!

Betty Lou Hebert

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9 posted 2002-12-06 01:26 PM


My IdaHO-HO-HO Friend~

Snow NOT Falling
(a soft play on your words)

The Florida trails are washed in sun
The breezes blowing, warmth is done
While up North the earth seem COLD
With all the snowflakes, I am told~

No secrets do the warm sands hold
Not to worry at getting cold
Stopping to listen to the sound
Of water waving in ocean's pound.

Now, burnished to the core
Skin needs balming from the store
Savoring every chance to stay
Home from work ... one more day !

Stopping to rest so I can hear
The sounds of carols sung so near
Rounding the corner, hoping I will
Find the singers ... singing still.

'Neath the palm tree over there
I watch them as they bow in prayer
Saying this moment is such a treasure
80 degrees fahrenheit .. such a pleasure !

Standing there I start to perspire
As December temperatures rise higher
I know this moment is unique.
A FLORIDA winter memory to keep !


*Here our 'Snowmen' come in liquid assemble~*

LOVE your write ... LOVE YOU~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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10 posted 2002-12-06 01:33 PM


Dear Marge:  Your poem is a wonderful gift and for a moment or two I almost felt that warm breeze blowing! I don't want to give up my blue spruce Christmas tree though, or the lights twinkling on the snow, so guess I'll have to stay for another Christmas in the Northwest!  Thanks for writing such a inviting reply! Maybe I'll leave for florida the day AFTER Christmas!

Love
Betty Lou

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11 posted 2002-12-06 01:36 PM


Dear Marge:  Your poem is a wonderful gift and for a moment or two I almost felt that warm breeze blowing! I don't want to give up my blue spruce Christmas tree though, or the lights twinkling on the snow, so guess I'll have to stay for another Christmas in the Northwest!  Thanks for writing such an inviting reply! Maybe I'll leave for Florida the day AFTER Christmas!

Love
Betty Lou

Betty Lou Hebert

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12 posted 2002-12-07 11:01 AM


Dearest Betty,

Such is the beauty that you've painted out of words, I savored the enchantment with a little shiver *grinZ* what I mean is I LOVE IT! wooohooo!

And Marge, I love your cheeky poem too! teehee

Lots of Love
Michelle

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13 posted 2002-12-07 06:01 PM


Michelle:  Thanks for responding and glad you enjoyed the poem.  Also Marge's!  Hers is more fun than mine!

Betty Lou Hebert

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14 posted 2002-12-09 06:52 AM


this lovely poem is much like a Currier and Ives painting...wonderful!

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost



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15 posted 2002-12-10 12:27 PM


pegasus111:  How nice to hear from you and thanks for the lovely remarks.  I love Currier and Ives paintings, so this is a wonderful compliment.

Betty Lou Hebert

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16 posted 2002-12-29 03:15 PM



Betty Lou~
This is simply beautiful.
You've painted the scene perfectly with your words.
Wonderfully done.
~Vicky

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you have not truly met the poet.
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17 posted 2002-12-29 10:23 PM


Vicky:  Thanks for reading and enjoyed your comments. Wish I could send some of this snow your way!

Betty Lou Hebert

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