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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2002-07-23 12:47 PM


Last night I saw... you in a new shade
Though I didn't know... whether I liked... you anymore.
The world... the color you painted
Crash on mine...
Then I realized...
That we are standing...
In the opposite end...
Of spectrum.

I... I used to think...
That you're wise.
I... I used to like...
Your words.

Now... now your true color shown,
What should I do?
Now... now you've become...
A stranger... that I don't know.

A stranger... that I don't know.

Eliza Simmons
~He is amazing regardless how we feel.
~He is amazing because He cares us regardless our beliefs.

© Copyright 2002 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
Riley
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1 posted 2002-07-23 02:49 PM


I really liked this particular piece, especially becasue I can't relate so much to it. I wasn't to sure about the .....in between some words at first but then as I read it, it sounded great. Great write, hope to hear more from you soon.


~*Riley*~

aries_luv_ppl
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2 posted 2002-07-23 03:30 PM


hey Riley, so you are new to the Forum? Welcome! Glad you like my poem. See you around soon

Eliza Simmons
~He is amazing regardless how we feel.
~He is amazing because He cares us regardless our beliefs.

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3 posted 2002-07-23 04:46 PM


Eliza:  Good poem about your feelings towards a person who has changed. This happens a lot in life I think.  I guess we need to treasure the moment, as change seems to be inevitable.

Betty Lou Hebert

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4 posted 2002-07-23 09:15 PM


Very well expressed Eliza.  I liked the hesitation marks.  Joyce
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