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LilTai
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0 posted 2002-06-10 04:42 PM



You wanna know if I feel the same way you do,
...
If you stay up entire nights waiting for sunrise,
     & wishing we were together to watch the beauty
If when you feel completely alone you can only
     think of me
   Then we feel the same way
If when pains seem too much to bear
     you want only to be in my arms
   Then we feel the same way
If you wake every day and collapse every night
     with me on your mind,
If when you dream you see you & I
     laying next to eachother & locked in forever
    Then we feel the same way
  Then we feel the same love


(I left this untitled, because the only title that comes to mind is something along the lines of "then we feel...", and I think with the repitition in the poem that would be to much...any thoughts?)

-Tai

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1 posted 2002-06-10 05:29 PM


You might call it Love Reciprocated.At least lets hope it is.  Joyce

LilTai
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2 posted 2002-06-10 05:43 PM


Hmm..I like that =)  Thanks for the reply =)

   Tai

I'm an idealist..I don't know where I'm going, but I'm on my way =)

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3 posted 2002-06-11 03:39 PM


The soul yearns for someone like them and yet longs for slight difference.  I enjoyed your poem and as for a title the only thing I could see would be 'Thoughts, Emotions, all as one'.  
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