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Trillium
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0 posted 2002-01-18 08:43 PM






Waiting For the Bus

It's six p.m.My work is done.
I wait and watch the sinking sun.
The bus is late.I give a sigh.
A streetlight comes to life nearby.
A cold green eye, against the sky.

It stares about impersonally.
A hostile chill creeps over me.
There's not another soul around
And as I look down at the ground,
I hear a sudden, hissing sound.

I look back at the light and see
It's long, arched neck hang threateningly.
Just like a python in the night,
That's opening it's mouth to bite,
But then, the bus comes into sight!

So from now on, somehow, someway,
I'll leave before the end of day
And I don't care what you may say,
A snake is living in that light.
Please don't scoff.I know I'm right!



Betty Lou Hebert


[This message has been edited by Trillium (01-20-2002 12:52 AM).]

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Joyce Johnson
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1 posted 2002-01-18 09:46 PM


Betty I'm sure you just have the 6 pm jitters.  This is coute.  Joyce
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2 posted 2002-01-18 10:44 PM


Trillium, mind over matter!  And I am with you....no telling what is in that light!  Hope you get home earlier from now on, 'cuz "it" will have time to grow.  Good luck,  ME
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3 posted 2002-01-19 05:30 AM


I like the story. We say our minds will play tricks, but we know what is really lurking out there…

Thanks

Melton

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4 posted 2002-01-19 09:30 AM


a delightful piece.  did you mean bit or bite?  

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost



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5 posted 2002-01-20 12:53 PM


Thanks Joyce:  I wrote this some years ago when I worked in Seattle and had a streetlight that hovered over me at the bus stop.  

Betty Lou Hebert

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6 posted 2002-01-20 12:55 PM


ME:  It's nice to meets someone who "knows" there are things hiding in the most familiar objects, that we have to watch out for! Thanks.

Betty Lou Hebert

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7 posted 2002-01-20 12:55 PM


Melton:  Thanks for reading and glad you agree with me!!

Betty Lou Hebert

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8 posted 2002-01-20 12:57 PM


pegasus111:  Thank you for commenting and also really appreciate your bringing the typo to my attention.  I definitely meant "bite".  I have corrected it. Good of you to let me know as I missed it in editing.

Betty Lou Hebert

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9 posted 2002-01-22 01:57 AM


BettyLou~
Such a captivating write~
That snake-in-the-light ... how DARE he !!
Good to see you back and prayers continue for Will's recovery~
God bless ya' gal~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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10 posted 2002-01-22 11:55 AM


Marge:  Thanks!  Both for your comment and for your prayers!  Will continues to gain ground.

Betty Lou Hebert

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11 posted 2002-01-22 11:05 PM



hey betty im as honest as the snake
love your story
and your words

hope you and will are better now.

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12 posted 2002-01-23 08:28 AM


Betty, this is cute! If I were you, I would leave work early from now on!

Hugs,
Deb

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13 posted 2002-01-23 05:39 PM


Soaring Eagle:  Good to see your comments. Thanks.

Betty Lou Hebert

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14 posted 2002-01-23 05:43 PM


Deb:  I found a job where I could ride the monorail, far from the street light!!!

Betty Lou Hebert

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15 posted 2002-01-24 10:51 PM


Proof positive that overtime never pays!  I liked the ominous feel of this, especially when you portrayed it in everyday, common things.  I think it is cool, that the bus became the hero.  Sometimes moving on can be the best relief!!


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