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Greeneyes617
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0 posted 2002-01-11 06:35 PM


Rain drips off the leaves and the sun's rays slice threw the black clouds.
Raindrops, like tiny jewels, sparkle in a spider's web.
The old cracked gate quietly squeaks in the gentle breeze.
I walk with noiseless feet, the sweet aroma of the damp soil drifts up to my nostrils.

This is, of course as you can see, unfinished. I thought I would post it anyways, since it has been so long since I last posted.



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Mother_Earth
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1 posted 2002-01-11 10:11 PM


Greeneyes, it may be unfinished, but it says alot.  And it is said beautifully.  ME
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2 posted 2002-01-12 02:11 AM


You've set a good descriptive stage.  I'm waiting to see where it leads.  Joyce
Denise
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3 posted 2002-01-12 11:44 AM


Welcome back Greeneyes! You have a beautiful beginning going here! Can't wait to read it when it's finished!
Irish Rose
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4 posted 2002-01-13 06:11 PM


I would love to read more of this, it has some great images!

Kathleen--(Kay)
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bestgirl911
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5 posted 2002-01-15 11:01 PM


Me too.....

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pegasus111
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6 posted 2002-01-16 12:06 PM


I agree with the others. A fine start. the beauty of it is that you can take it anywhere you want from here. It might be interesting for you to do several different versions using the same introduction.

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost



BloomingRose
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7 posted 2002-01-16 11:32 AM


wow...all I can say is encore!
Please finish, this is outstanding.

Deb

Greeneyes617
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8 posted 2002-01-18 11:39 AM


Thank you for all your encouraging words. Things have been crazy so I haven't been able to work on this poem, let alone post other..Well once again..thanks.
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