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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2002-01-09 06:49 PM


Is it a grey grey day over the earth?
or is it a grey grey cloud over my head?
Everything seems to lose its taste-
the blood is dark with pioson at my mind.

Where's the rainbow after the rain?
Children grow up just to strike their mothers' heart with their tongue.
Lovers kiss to dig one's heart a grave
to farewell him with a goodbye kiss.

Where's the direction of compass?
I feel like a lost child alone in rain.
Everybody is a single box-
outside is decoration;
inside is loneliness.

Where's the gifts that fill the boxes?
Are we all forgetful or shy?
Everyday passes by with the same routines,
it makes me tired, want to sleep.
And by sleeping does it end all
or it is some kind of horrify beginning?

Eliza Simmons
~Flower lasts so an hour, yet spring will brings her back to life again.

© Copyright 2002 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
Wikket
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1 posted 2002-01-09 08:02 PM


aries_luv_ppl:  Wow!  This really pulled me in because it's how I feel most times.  I have to tell myself sometimes, '...the world is not all bad; quit looking at the bad things and focus on seeing the good.'     Your poem emits a strong, focused intelligence...great!  

~~Jamie

"...Two roads diverged in a wood, and I--took the one less traveled by, And that has made all the difference." --Robert Frost

Irish Rose
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2 posted 2002-01-12 07:13 PM


this is soft, delicate verse, hon.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Denise
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3 posted 2002-01-13 11:37 AM


We all experience those grey days. It makes us appreciate the sunny ones even more! Great expression, Aires!
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4 posted 2002-01-13 02:30 PM


Gray days sometimes seem to last forever, but they do end and things do get better!

Betty Lou Hebert

Solstice Son
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5 posted 2002-01-14 03:32 PM


Hmmmm....as I read, I wondered, and that alone shows how good this is

Sol

" The question shouldn't be...'Why are we here?' but rather 'ARE we here? "

Leonard Nimoy


aries_luv_ppl
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6 posted 2002-01-14 03:40 PM


oh ya, alone sometimes is good... but if you see a group of children playing under the light of a candle or Christmas tree, it may make you want to have a company.

Eliza Simmons
~Flower lasts so an hour, yet spring will brings her back to life again.

pegasus111
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7 posted 2002-01-15 09:39 AM


touching and very insightful..good work here

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost



BloomingRose
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since 2000-08-09
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8 posted 2002-01-16 02:31 PM


Never be afraid to reach for a dream. It's in the reaching we can look up and see the blue skies, and sometimes we can find the rainbow too.
I wish for you all happiness.

Hugs,
Deb

Mother_Earth
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9 posted 2002-01-18 03:53 PM


aries, a gray day that goes on forever.....boy is that hard to live with.  Say it can't be true!  I know the feeling though.  Deep, deep thoughts.  Stiff upper lip and all that stuff,  ME
2dalimit
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10 posted 2002-01-19 05:14 AM


Deep dark thoughts. I like your ending. Good read  

Melton

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