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0 posted 2001-11-16 07:06 PM






A Morning in October

It's a wild and windy morning
And the air is full of sighs
And the mist is drifting, drifting,
Where the reedy water lies.

I can hear a raven calling
As he rides upon the breeze
And the leaves are falling, falling,
From the lonely autumn trees.

It's a wild and windy morning
And my heart is sad to hear
There's the sound of wild geese calling
From the higher atmosphere.

Now the winter's nearly with us
When the days are cold and gray
And the snow is blowing, blowing,
So I've put my dreams away!



Betty Lou Hebert



Published in Best of Rhyme Time 1991
Published in Sunday Suitor 1998

[This message has been edited by Trillium (edited 11-16-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-11-16 09:32 PM


Very nice but sad. Are you sad? Cheer up=) Let me give you a *hug*

~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordinary things extraordinary.

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2 posted 2001-11-16 09:59 PM


I'm not surprised that you have so many poems published. You are quite talented, Betty! This is beautifully done!
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3 posted 2001-11-16 11:32 PM


Lizzie Vivian:  I am not sad, although I do sometimes write about sad things. However, I'll take that hug you offered!  Thanks.

Betty Lou Hebert

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4 posted 2001-11-16 11:35 PM


Denise:  Thanks for your nice comments!  I started publishing in the small press magazines about 17 years ago.  By the time I got a computer........a couple of years ago........I had hundreds of poems already published.  I still submit to a lot of them.

Betty Lou Hebert

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5 posted 2001-11-17 11:59 AM


I really like this as I do all of your poems, the last line however I would tend not to agree with (not a critique) just my opinion.. I say never put your dreams away.. just make "adaptations". or put them on hold for a little while, which is what you probally meant anyway. I am a optimist most of the time, as you probally know already.
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6 posted 2001-11-17 02:36 PM


Songbird:  Thanks for all your comments and I can see what you mean about the last line. I should have conveyed that I was putting my dreams away for the winter. I didn't realize that this poem would come across to others as being so sad.  I guess when you can't tell what frame of mind the poet is in, you see things the person who wrote it doesn't.
I am an optimistic person also and I was not feeling sad when I wrote this.

Betty Lou Hebert

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