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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2001-11-15 10:53 PM


//The title is a symbol of something.

When I'm alone at night
I ask myself what I'm not deserved?
I'm oil to water, corner of circles;
I'm a black dot on a piece of paper
Who hate her own shadows.
Rainbow might not know who I am
But I know deep down in my heart
I'm an unworthy person
Who should be slighted.
However rekindle my spirit,
Let's all people, if not me,
Be happy and forever
Beloved by friends and lover,
Fullful my dream.

Lizzy Vivian http://members.shaw.ca/home0/

~A little sour add to taste of life.
~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordina

© Copyright 2001 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2001-11-16 12:04 PM


Vivian~
Your writing charms me ~
You are VERY worthy to be called both poet and friend~

*Big Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Martie
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2 posted 2001-11-16 12:17 PM


aries..this is a special poem from a very lovely lady...thank you for posting such a heart of words.
vlraynes
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3 posted 2001-11-16 12:36 PM



Vivian-
   This is a beautiful expression of your
   thoughts and feelings...you've written them well.
   You are VERY worthy of happiness and more, my friend.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

dgvarner
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4 posted 2001-11-16 12:50 PM


vivian...none of us are "unworthy persons who should be slighted..."     you are very deserving my friend...dont you forget it!  

much feeling in this write...

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"am i in too deep--
have i lost my mind?
i dont care--
youre near, tonite..."
-enrique

Dee
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5 posted 2001-11-16 12:52 PM


Vivian, anyone who thinks you are unworthy should take another look. I see a lot of love in your huge heart. That to me makes you a very special lady.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life.     a brand

Charisma
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6 posted 2001-11-16 03:01 AM


oh Vivian, YOU ARE precious too, and worth so much more than you may think, my friend.

(((warm hugs)))
Charisma ~*TMP*~

rwood
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7 posted 2001-11-16 05:48 AM


Your poem has just made you beautiful to me. I can't imagine such a gift being present in the heart of someone undeserving. Keep writing...as you are as important as the next person..and I'll await your next verse!! {{Hugs}}  

P.S. Wecome to the place where poets are treasures.

Sincerely,
Regina

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Except for what's in the heart.
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ellie LeJeune
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8 posted 2001-11-16 06:13 AM


Dear poetess; I know these feelings very well. I too have had to "relearn" my own lovableness and my unique inner and outer beauty. You are love! Everything else is a lie! You are also a gifted poet...Believe! Hugs, Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2001-11-16 08:06 AM


Aries,
I agree with Marge. *L*

BloomingRose
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10 posted 2001-11-16 08:07 AM



May dreams bloom in your heart
and peace rest upon your shoulders~
Hugs,
Deb

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11 posted 2001-11-16 08:54 AM


Vivian~This is a very beautiful and all too familiar write my friend!  You are very deserving and also very talented.  YOU deserve so much!  Write it out as most of us have...it really helps.  
Hugs to you sweet one...and many many blessings.  
~Smiles, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

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12 posted 2001-11-16 09:03 AM


Vivian~   (((hugs))) I think you are very special, and worthy of nothing less than happiness and love......don't ever put yourself down.....anytime you need someone to talk to, you can email me  
Logan
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13 posted 2001-11-16 11:39 AM


Vivian...please accept my post to you with the warmth of the fire that chases the darkness and know you are worthy...very gentle smile
Rex Allen McCoy
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14 posted 2001-11-16 11:50 AM


We all find it difficult to look within ourselves and see what others see
but I have to echo the others here and say, you are a special person and a talented writer

aries_luv_ppl
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15 posted 2001-11-16 11:55 AM


Thank you all for your replies. Please read my special thanks in the other thread.

~A little sour add to taste of life.
~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordina

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16 posted 2001-11-16 12:24 PM



Sometimes we have to explore all of the dark avenues to find the light that lives on soul's street...

well done, my dear...

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17 posted 2001-11-16 12:35 PM


Lizzy Vivian:  You deserve happiness just as we all do!  I have enjoyed your poetry and though you may be going through a dark time right now, please know that we at Passions are your friends and look forward to reading what you have to say. Here you are a valued poet and friend.
aries_luv_ppl
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18 posted 2001-11-16 12:50 PM


Thank you McCoy and Sunshine. And especailly to Trillium!

~A little sour add to taste of life.
~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordina

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19 posted 2001-11-16 01:20 PM


I think many of us have uttered similar cries... I know I have (though mine is usually in wail form, not beautiful poetry like this. *S*) But the truth is, we are all worthy, all created in the same image... Great work, aries... I'll look forward to reading more from you. *S*
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20 posted 2001-11-16 01:21 PM


It's like the saying goes.."God don't make no mistakes." You're here, you're alive and and there is always a reason. You may not feel the pride but I can say I'm proud knowing ya! So get a smile on that pretty face and look forward to a wonderful future..
aries_luv_ppl
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21 posted 2001-11-16 01:42 PM


Thanks Balladeer and suthern. Those are great comfort=) Please read my poem untitled and under the thread Thank You. God Bless You!

~A little sour add to taste of life.
~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordina

Soaringeagle
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22 posted 2001-11-16 01:47 PM


Between the lines is seen
deep within your soul
this awakening angel
come fly in this
circle of love and hugs.

from canada with love.

aries_luv_ppl
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23 posted 2001-11-16 01:51 PM


Yeah Canada! Way to go=)

~A little sour add to taste of life.
~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordina

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24 posted 2001-11-16 02:27 PM


Aries,

IT's good to write about our insecurities and faults, then we can get on with learning to love ourselves.

Hugs,

Corinne

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25 posted 2001-11-16 03:06 PM


Aries, a heart like yours can not be undeserving, and we here at passions are proud to call you friend.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

aries_luv_ppl
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26 posted 2001-11-16 03:24 PM


thank you gentle spirit=) you're gentle just like your name=)

~A little sour add to taste of life.
~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordina

Titia Geertman
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27 posted 2001-11-16 07:36 PM


Hi Viv, real nice poem you wrote.

Moments of feeling unworthy we share
You expressed them well and we do care
Being among friends is a good thing
So, when you feel unworthy give a ring
And we'll rush over to comfort you
Cause you're a poet and a good one too


HUGS, Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
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aries_luv_ppl
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28 posted 2001-11-16 07:46 PM


thanks Titia! *Hugs* You all make me want to cry 8... I'm too happy=)

~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordinary things extraordinary.

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29 posted 2001-11-16 09:09 PM


Hi Aries,

I have found this piece to be full of honesty and with open heart I say to you (YOU) are worthy of happiness in all it's many forms, never ever let anyone say different, may your life be blessed.

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



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30 posted 2001-11-16 09:24 PM


As Cerenity has said, this was written with an open heart. All I an do here is ditto what has already been said, take care!

"Let me pierce the realm of glamour
So I know just what I am." ~ Van Morrison


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31 posted 2001-11-21 01:35 AM


Your poem touches my heart PoetFriend...
TeddyBearHugs2u
*~coco~*

sandgrain
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32 posted 2001-11-23 04:35 PM


Not one of us is worthy of Gods great gifts, but He said we're made in His image and that's love.  It's everywhere in your writings exposing your loving heart.  God makes and loves only good.  That, my dear, includes you!  We're blessed to have you here in Passions family.  
  Rae

aries_luv_ppl
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33 posted 2001-11-23 04:45 PM


Thanks Cerenity and EagleOne, I'll take care and bless you  

Coco, I'm glad it touches you.

Rae, thanks for your words  

~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordinary things extraordinary.

sandgrain
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34 posted 2001-11-23 04:56 PM


Dearest Vivian, none of us are worthy of God's bountiful blessings, but He made us in His image of LOVE and wants us to accept His gifts.  We all need to be humble, but not downtrodden, despairing or hopless.  Your heart overflows with God's love.  It shows in your writings and I, too, consider you a blessing as part of this Passions family.
  Rae
Sorry, thought I lost the first reply before posting, so wrote another.

[This message has been edited by sandgrain (edited 11-23-2001).]

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