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Greeneyes617
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since 2000-11-22

Posts 329
Arkansas

0 posted 2001-10-31 11:19 PM

This is something I wrote in my English class. We have been working on Poetry Sketches. We were to take one quote, four pre selected words and one of our vocabulary words. This is what I came up with.

" I walk, with noiseless feet" around the soft gray stone.
Fairies dance through the silivery cascading water of the fountain.
Silently I draw in a deep breath and move closer.
I abstain for reaching out and touching their translucent wings.
The ground begans to shake.
I fall into black nothingness.
Everything stops.
When I open my eyes, I see the cornflower blue sky above me.

That's all I have right now. I am thinking about turning it into a short story.
Quote by: John G. Whittier

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2001-10-31 11:38 PM

Very nice. It's hard to write using someone else's ideas. joyce

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

2 posted 2001-11-01 01:07 AM

This is an interesting beginning and I'm sure could be enlarged into a story. Good luck with it!

Betty Lou Hebert

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2001-11-01 12:48 PM

Greeneyes~
This is really quite creatively done~
I enjoyed the progression of your thoughts.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Solstice Son
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since 2000-09-19

Posts 469

4 posted 2001-11-01 04:19 PM

HAH!!! Green eyes rule!!!! And the poem is grand as well

Green-eyed Sol

" The question shouldn't be...'Why are we here?' but rather 'ARE we here? "

Leonard Nimoy

Greeneyes617
Member

since 2000-11-22

Posts 329
Arkansas

5 posted 2001-11-01 05:01 PM

Thanks so much for your replys. It has been forever since I have wrote anything worth posting. I am hopeful that I will soon get rid of this horrid writer's block. Anyways, thanks again!!

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

6 posted 2001-11-01 05:36 PM

Absolutely enchanting!!! Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

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