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A Hostile Presence - Part 2

A hostile presence I could feel.
The sense of it was very real.
A rocking chair began to sway
Back and forth, although no way
Could I have influenced it's space.
I felt my heart begin to race.
A humming sound began to grow.
It had an evil source I know.
I slowly backed out of the door,
To cross the rooms until once more,
I was outside, upon the walk.
I put the key inside to lock
The oaken door.  Was shocked to find
That it had locked itself behind.
Or something did!  I drove away
Knowing that I would never stay
Inside a house where spirits dwell
And do not want me there as well.
The house stayed vacant and I knew
That other folks had found it too
And been repelled by this mean haunt
Who liked to frighten and to taunt.
The place fell into disrepair
And finally became a lair
For vagrants, until it was sold.
A stretch of freeway would enfold
That spiteful spot and I for one,
Was glad to see it's day was done!




Betty Lou Hebert

© Copyright 2001 Betty Lou Hebert - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-27 09:45 PM


BettyLou~
Well, I wonder where the little spirit went ?
Probably took the new freeway to the mall~

Good show, gal~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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2 posted 2001-10-27 11:00 PM


Intriguing story Betty.  joyce
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3 posted 2001-10-28 02:49 PM


Thanks Marge and Joyce for reading and appreciate your remarks.

Betty Lou Hebert

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4 posted 2001-10-28 05:22 PM


Very good, Betty Lou! Great conclusion!
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5 posted 2001-10-28 10:47 PM


Very well done.  I liked the rhyming and the flow of the poem, plus the story telling was excellent.

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6 posted 2001-10-28 11:03 PM


Denise and Wesley:  Thank you both for reading and appreciate your remarks.

Betty Lou Hebert

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