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ellie LeJeune
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0 posted 2001-08-25 08:53 PM


The coming misty morns
of summers fading into fall,
bring a magic of their own.

Pungent earthy aroma
of sweet rose petals,
and green shady leaves...

sigh a last breath.

A death full of promise,
as a fulfillment of Spring.

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

© Copyright 2001 ellie LeJeune - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-08-26 11:47 AM


This is wonderful.  To every season its due.  Joyce
Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-08-26 11:57 AM


I'm a big fan of your writing, this is one reason why... It appears as though you buried something deep within this piece that is peeking out, but is hard to identify.  I have some confusion here as to whether you are creating a metaphor for death in the form of autumn, a metaphor for autumn in the form of death, or just drawing a comparison... or maybe I'm way, way off... LOL  
Either way, the image here was vivid - you have a talent for imagery, in your poetry I always feel the colours come alive.
Keep up the wonderful work.
Your faithful fan,
~Allan

You eat the brains of an old, wise man.

Denise
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3 posted 2001-08-26 02:25 PM


Lovely, Ellie! Very nice!
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4 posted 2001-08-26 03:24 PM


Your poems are always uplifting and full of wisdom.

Betty Lou Hebert

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5 posted 2001-08-26 03:24 PM


Ellie, wow.. its like you took our preacher's sermon and put it in condensed poetic form.  So much meaning in so few lines.
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6 posted 2001-08-29 10:33 AM


I love to walk in newly plowed fields in spring just to smell the soil.It is a smell of the rebirth from winter.Good write.

paladin

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