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Gypsy
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since 2001-06-15
Posts 20
VA Coast

0 posted 2001-07-12 01:51 PM



(This is a work in progress, I more than anything needed to vent)  


I've thrown it all out
onto the table
yet his hands keep melting into an old lover's
I can't stand the memories
of those winding roads
and the endless mountains
but I keep journeying there
asking for answers
I have a letter, returned
and now unsent
with his name pressed against it
my dreams are revealing all those secret fantasies
and slowly I'm scarying myself
with these rituals
his face changes in ther light
dancing carefully it emerges with a different set of eyes
I wonder softly if it's the devil
or God indulging my illusions
calming me or leading me on
the table is cluttered and stacked high
if i wash the stains away
what road awaits me
is this old lover simply a ghost here haunting me
with the whispers of sweet soulful breathe
do i have the memories confused
does he still think of me too
even with a body of his own pressed carefully
against his delicate skin and satin sheets
have i lost my mind in this daydreaming
the words end up lost with each visit
and i hang hopelessly upon this branch
swinging
about to fall
straight into the unknown
my passion is exploding
sitting here typing
one more word expressed
might spill his existence into reality
i can't make my way through many more clouds
so strangling they've become
the scent heavy
a thousand roses blooming
and i don't know his feelings and i'm trapped
waiting for the stamp on this old letter
to fly my love, my memories
into his fragile world
and i look on passed the glass door
separating our souls

To be great is to be misunderstood. Emerson

© Copyright 2001 Brook J. Shaddeau - All Rights Reserved
Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
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Mobile, AL
1 posted 2001-07-12 06:28 PM


I really liked the thought of clouds choking. Geesh..there is so much more in here I loved too.   You never dissappoint me, yanno?

Joyce Johnson
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Member Rara Avis
since 2001-03-10
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Washington State
2 posted 2001-07-12 07:38 PM


We country folk have an old saying. "No use beating a dead horse."  But there is lots of feeling in this poem.  Joyce
Inanothertime
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since 2001-06-29
Posts 72

3 posted 2001-07-18 08:01 AM


this is very sad, and lingering in the past. I hope you are able to move forward soon--we can all only stand beating ourselves up to a point--breath new air, good luck, Gypsy!


Voiceless
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since 2001-02-19
Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind
4 posted 2001-07-18 10:58 PM


I know exactly what you mean...
When I read this I felt
....everything...
great job...

~*Freedom Is Not Free*~ (Korean War Memorial)

Trillium
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5 posted 2001-07-19 10:57 PM


This is a very moving poem.  Hope there's a happier tomorrow awaiting you!

Betty Lou Hebert

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