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Irish Rose
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0 posted 2001-05-23 01:51 PM



Come, breathe in my love and adoration.
Come, let it be anointing to your being.
A rhapsody in full score consecration
of all we are, and all that we can be.
Remove the silken veil before my eyes
and show me in your countenance, my love.
That I am loved more than I realize
and you are heaven's gift sent from above.
My words fall trite in burning innocence
and yet, I feel the words are very real.
For in our time of fate we have been blessed.
And in our love, your countenance can heal.
Come, breathe the thought from lips that never lie.
Come feel the love before your time draws nigh.


Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 05-23-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Kathleen - All Rights Reserved
Joyce Johnson
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1 posted 2001-05-23 03:42 PM


This is so well presented and well done.  Joyce
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2 posted 2001-05-24 05:22 PM


A really beautiful sonnet and excellently written.

Betty Lou Hebert

Lone Wolf
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3 posted 2001-05-25 07:01 AM


Perfectly done, sweetheart.  You are very good at sonnets, I think you've mastered them!  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

2dalimit
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4 posted 2001-05-25 07:09 AM


I enjoyed this absolute "true love" sonnet very much.
Melton

ellie LeJeune
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5 posted 2001-05-26 05:40 AM


Oh, this is so beautiful! A lovely sonnet of love and devotion. i find these impossible for me to write, so I admire your skill and talent here. Exquisite!  Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Denise
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6 posted 2001-05-26 08:40 AM


Very beautiful, Kathleen!
Panne447
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7 posted 2001-05-30 02:36 PM


Irish R, Excellent piece. Really liked your sentiments.  Just in case you didn't notice or in case you want perfection, lines 2 and 3 each have 11 syls - not exactly pentameter.  But other than those 2 spots the whole piece was right on. I really enjoyed this - love to see someone writing more classical forms of poetry. Panne
RebeccaJoy
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8 posted 2001-05-30 08:13 PM


This is beautiful, and goes very well with the picture.  Very nice!
Irish Rose
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9 posted 2001-05-30 09:34 PM


Thank you all for your gracious comments and I am still struggling with meter!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Songbird
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10 posted 2001-05-31 01:02 AM


Lovely sonnet.. I have never attempted one yet.. can't even get two first lines.. I appreciate those who can.
Romy
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11 posted 2001-06-03 10:11 AM


Irish Rose,
I struggle with meter too, but I think you wrote yours beautifully!  I really loved your poem, in fact had to read it twice!

Debbie

Irish Rose
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12 posted 2001-06-03 10:45 AM


thank you so much!!!!!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Dark Angel
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13 posted 2001-07-23 06:02 PM


O,my Ms Rose, this is indeed very beautiful  

I love it!
into my library it goes.

Maree

"little miss understood
little misunderstood"

~Marry me Jane~


Honeybee
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14 posted 2001-07-24 01:49 PM



This beautiful sonnet is the breath of perfection, I love it, and you chose a perfect picture to enhance your words  
As always, Kathleen, you pen wonderful sonnets;  It's a keeper for sure~

Melissa~

BloomingRose
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15 posted 2001-07-24 07:24 PM


A captivating sonnet. You write so well.
I really admire your gift.

Hugs,
Deb

[This message has been edited by BloomingRose (edited 07-24-2001).]

Irish Rose
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16 posted 2001-07-24 07:43 PM


thank you for reading this, I'm glad you liked my sonnet, I've written about 30. I appreciate your reading very much!

" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis"

Kathleen


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