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Trillium
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0 posted 2001-05-22 05:33 PM


A bard has come into our hall
And when the evening meal is through,
He'll tell us what he can recall
Of when this land was new.

We hurry through our chores so we
Can gather near the fireplace.
I love to see the flickering light
Illuminate each face.

So late into the night we stay,
Enraptured by the tales he tells.
Listening to his Druid's voice,
That weaves it's magic spells.

The fire dies, the children sleep,
But still entranced, we stay,
Until the rooster crows to show
That night has slipped away.

Then all day long our heads are filled
With visions of the past.
We don't know when he'll come again,
So memories must last!

Betty Lou Hebert

© Copyright 2001 Betty Lou Hebert - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2001-05-22 07:38 PM


Very good, Betty Lou! I enjoyed your little tale!
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Gaia
2 posted 2001-05-22 11:53 PM


I really like this one. It makes me want to sit and listen to your bard.
Thanks,
from Midnitesun

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3 posted 2001-05-23 02:06 AM


What a lovely thing, to have a bard entertain you.  Joyce
deleeme
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4 posted 2001-05-23 06:20 AM


You weave an enchanting vision, of privileged exposure, of rich atmosphere-common, yet expectfully yearning.  Your present verse speaks very highly of your own ability to grasp the attention of others and keep it.
    Enjoyed it much!
          David

No Better Place do I know
Than where Hearts knit as
one,
For in that grand
experience,
The Better ALL become.

God Bless us All!!!

[This message has been edited by deleeme (edited 05-23-2001).]

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ireland
5 posted 2001-05-23 01:41 PM


Then all day long our heads are filled
With visions of the past.
We don't know when he'll come again,
So memories must last!

enjoyed this one alot, the last two lines ring true for a lot of circumstances.

"across the unfair divide
where black will never meet white
so read my token lips
like they never exist"

nicky wire


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6 posted 2001-05-23 01:53 PM


lovely meter, this flowed flawlessly

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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7 posted 2001-05-23 11:13 PM


I appreciate the messages from everyone and your nice remarks.  Thanks.

Betty Lou Hebert

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