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Night Whispers (written with Jamie)
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Night Whispers (written with Jamie) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Words spoken in darkness whispered in my ear carry softly an invitation their wanton motive quite clear Butterfly touches upon a cheek path traced by fingertips Goosebumps pebble the trail traveled by softly searching lips Does the heart beat louder As day turns into night? Will regret show itself or will love finally requite In darkness now we whisper Of a promise and a plan. for a bright tomorrow and of when we first began Darkness surrounds us With soft words, sighs of bliss immersion of our oneness praying it stays like this **Jamie (Prometheus) and I had such fun writing this together but found it difficult as the sheets got soaked with perspiration - the sheets of paper! What did you think we meant! LOL |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Well you two....This is Wonderful! you make a great team...Hope to see more  |
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Dusk Treader
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Beautiful poem Sharon and Jamie! Loved that second verse, especially "butterfly touches upon a cheek." And that last verse... I hope and pray it stays like that too! Wonderful! Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am in awe....Not only is this lovely and sweet, but you Guys were actually close enough to sweat together? Man o man, I need to take a computer class, I've definitely been doing something wrong!!! Great job here, I enjoyed...and it's so nice to see all the co-operation around here!!!LOL...and thanks. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
wow you two...no offense Ms deVine but....Jamie I'd love to look into your brown eyes while you were reading this one guy...lol never say never |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Lovely whispers in the night....well done to both of you. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
One of the most sensual moments is in a whisper... well well done, to both of you! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Now there'll be none of this ... and none of that ... and ... oooh ... hey! stop thaaaaa ... yessss! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind words! Jamie? Where are you? LOL Can you tell which are my words and which are his? It's hard for ME and is there! This was fun and I urge everyone to give it a shot...are two poet heads better than one? Well, maybe not better, but certainly more fun!  |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I really enjoyed this...well I will have to wait to get to know some of you better before I share my perspiration on the sheets with you..well you know what I mean...you made me break a smile again... ~~softly Maureen |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ooh la, la .... such a beautiful and poetic pairing Sharon and Jamie! A waltz of the pens beneath those sheets! Wonderful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
WOW you two are steaming up my screen... leave it to a fireman to scorch us ladies with his pen... and Sharon...i always knew you were hot stuff  all kidding aside this is sensual and lovely... wonderful chemistry... bring your hose jamie...your smoking us jm |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetdeVine and Prometheus~ Well, this is wonderful ! You two did a wonderful job on this collaborative effort. Sharon and Jamie you both are so talented. What a talent to be able to work together. Prometheus is certainly in the right profession to put out the fires this one ignites ! Firefighters are ALWAYS in heat ! *Jamie~ Here's a little poem I did by that title /pip/Forum24/HTML/000317.html Hope you enjoy it ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
(whispers mumbled sounds)...pssst... hey Poet DeVine and Jamie, this was fabulous (and now SHOUTS) I AM JEALOUS COZ YOU HAD FUN.....  hey now its cool again... terrific work... lovely.... regards, sudhir |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I echo PDV's thank you's. And I am here Sharon...lol I cannot recommend highly enough writing with someone... I have greatly enjoyed this one and the ones I have done with Maree and Kamle as well. It keeps you on your toes, gives you fresh perspective and the give and take is a great exercise in compromise...lol And Paula-- my eyes are great I must admit..lol but my southern accent may ruin it for you... Marge-- great poem about our perpetual warmness....lol sudhir---I can just say---nyaa nyaa-- hahahaha-- just kidding... thanks again everyone Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, Sharon and Jamie! Denise |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful!! Sometimes, a whisper can speak volumes. . . Excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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N2Wishin Junior Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 38 |
Cool Poem!!! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
shhhh...a very soft thanks you guys Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You guys do a great job together! Wonderful writing!! What did I think? You don't really want to know about those sheets now do ya?  |
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