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Only The Stars See Me Cry

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 07-29-2000 09:22 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

~Only The Stars See Me Cry~

A warm breeze is all that holds me on this empty, long, night,
embraced only by the cloud's shadows, feeling a deep need to write.
A thousand stars dance above me, as does a celestial blue moon,
their presence, my quiet comfort, but like you...they will be gone too soon.

I wonder what you are doing, who your with and where you are,
I'd sell my soul to know ... we were both wishing on the same star.
I was only looking for a little peace ... for something kind ...
and for just a little while, I believed ... you were that find.

I brought this on myself ... falling for my own fantasy,
now my heart breaks under the sudden weight of this cold reality.
I cant hold you to promises that you never made,
yet each passing second I find more of me that I'm willing to trade.

I don't wanna be like this anymore ... so emotional, needy and weak,
where am I supposed to go with this, you were the quiet comfort I seek.
I tried so hard to hold you, to make you want to stay ...
how poetically ironic the intensity of my need is what scared you away.

Alone again, I sit and hurt and wonder why ...
and I cry a tear ... for every star I see in the sky.
Only the moon sees me, he seems to understand,
come morn the sun will find me still here ... heart in my hand.

Janet Marie

*repost from open 7
for a friend, to help you understand


© Copyright 2000 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 07-29-2000 09:26 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Oh, JM, this is exquisite...beautiful, romantic, sad...the whole package. I love it....
Mark Bohannan
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2 posted 07-29-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

ooohhhh girl this is so sad.  I can imagine the heart break of the reality.  I hope writing this took some of the pain away.  Wonderful heartfelt verse.

[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 07-29-2000).]
Lone Wolf
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3 posted 07-29-2000 09:32 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

JM,

This was so touching and full of lonliness that I am sitting here with tears streaming down my face.  Oh, how we have all been there at one time or another.  You have such talent to write from your heart to your pen.  It seems nothing is ever lost in the translation.  I hope your friend sees the beauty here and makes a wish upon a star.  Wonderful writing my friend.

Lone Wolf


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4 posted 07-29-2000 09:33 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Janet--there is so much honesty and raw feeling in this...it always impresses me how you spread your heart out for us to see...and it is a lovely heart, you know.  
Nate Dogg
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5 posted 07-29-2000 10:18 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Exellcent piece of sad expressions, Janet. I just love it when poet just opens their heart for the world see. Thanks for sharing.

Keep wishing on a star,
and you'll find someone soon,
so that you'll both will smile,
under the clear blue moon.

Nathan
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A heart in hand,
a heart on sleeve,
still wet with tears
cried at your leave...

Quickened, but not born again,
in remorse, remember when...
I take your strength,
believe again...
your memory is my life's reprieve...
Solemn vow--I DO believe.

loved this one JM---impossible not to...
smiles across the miles to you...
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I don't recall having seen this one before Janet. Thanks for the chance to read...Awesome!!!

God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown


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8 posted 07-30-2000 01:37 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

JanetMarie~

Volumes of you here, my friend.

'I cant hold you to promises that you never made,
yet each passing second I find more of me that I'm willing to trade.'

~*Marge*~



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ethome
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Great poem Janet I agree with Marge I love the lines
"I can't hold you to promises you never made
yet each passing second I find more of me I'm willing to trade."

Amazing is'nt it, how easy it is to compromise our principles for love

The last part is very melancholy and sad but you capture the atmosphere so well.. sitting there on such a romantic night with your heart in your hand and lonely.....it's like the blues baby.......excellent.....ethome..
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Janny~
This my friend is an exceptional piece, sad with such longing yet beautiful...well done
Love Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

brian madden
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Jan, wow another amazing piece. Thanks for sharing this repost.  

"A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun
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A warm breeze is all that holds me on this empty, long, night,
embraced only by the cloud's shadows, feeling a deep need to write.
A thousand stars dance above me, as does a celestial blue moon,
their presence, my quiet comfort, but like you...they will be gone too soon.

I wonder what you are doing, who your with and where you are,
I'd sell my soul to know ... we were both wishing on the same star.
I was only looking for a little peace ... for something kind ...
and for just a little while, I believed ... you were that find.

I brought this on myself ... falling for my own fantasy,
now my heart breaks under the sudden weight of this cold reality.
I cant hold you to promises that you never made,
yet each passing second I find more of me that I'm willing to trade.

I don't wanna be like this anymore ... so emotional, needy and weak,
where am I supposed to go with this, you were the quiet comfort I seek.
I tried so hard to hold you, to make you want to stay ...
how poetically ironic the intensity of my need is what scared you away.

Alone again, I sit and hurt and wonder why ...
and I cry a tear ... for every star I see in the sky.
Only the moon sees me, he seems to understand,
come morn the sun will find me still here ... heart in my hand.

***************************************

I couldn't choose a favorite line in this one , without the rest no line stands on it's own, but together they make a poem that is as close to perfection as I have seen

I can remember a time when I felt this very same feeling, and you have a way of showing all of us that we are not alone. For that I want to say Thank you
Nan
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Sometimes we make our greatest fears actually come true, don't we?? We dwell so deeply on a potential loss, we enable it to happen... Nice poem here, my friend..
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I brought this on myself ... falling for my own fantasy,


this was  wonderfully written..can't tell you how it stopped me from breathing a few times...
~~softly
Maureen

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So many wonderful passeges in this heartfelt poem, that could only come from on who has been in love. So well written, I applaud your openness of heart and soul
Liz
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A very sad read Janet
you really have the talented ability to captivate the reader
beautifully written

Rex
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"Only the moon sees me, he seems to understand,
come morn the sun will find me still here ... heart in my hand."

Such a beautifully gentle and tender read Janet Marie. I adored the closing lines ... exquisite!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
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Absolutely wonderful. The muse is back!  
Paula Finn
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19 posted 07-30-2000 11:19 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

Its like you are taking pages out of my life JM...

never say never
kitkat
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Janet--This was lovely and sad. Your writing abilities just amaze me.
Marina
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This speaks volumes Jan!!!!!!   I hope your friend will now truly understand your pain.

Marina


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JM - an eternal fan of yours I am and this has just emphasised the need to be. Wonderful!

jwesley
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Not sure about your friend, but I thank you.........................
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Oh JM, this is wonderful! I can relate to this very well. I know what you're going through, because I'm going through the same thing. E-mail me if you want to talk.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea
 
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