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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 2000-07-29 01:58 PM


Naked

See me here
I stand before you
All my faults
Now in clear view
Watch me now
As walls are falling
Mortar’s crumbling
Bricks are too

See the mask
Of ivory porcelain
Thrown aside
Cast to the ground
Tears once dammed
Are freely flowing
As my world
Falls all around

Watch my past
Pour out in mirrors
Kiss my eyes
To ebb the flow
Hold me now
Here in the halflight
As trembling to
My knees I go

Listen to the
Words I’m saying
From tongue once mute
Now truth is spilled
Sense my fear
As I am striping
Each item shed
Shows more revealed

Piece by piece
It’s molt before you
There’s nothing sacred
There’s nothing lost
No more lies
No more disguises
A new lease
Love’s paid the cost

Whisper to me
My deaf ears hearing
With your words
They’re opened wide
I’m stumbling now
But I’m not fearing
Because you’re standing
By my side

Look at all
These imperfections
Feel the scars
I once had loathed
As here I stand
Now bared before you
See me naked
Though fully clothed

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What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compaired to what lies within us.
~Ralph Waldo Emerson


[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 07-29-2000).]

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Poet deVine
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1 posted 2000-07-29 02:00 PM


Ruth! This has got to be one of your best EVER...so full of emotion. Wow..I really love it.    
Sunshine
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2 posted 2000-07-29 02:08 PM


Ruth, so pleased am I to see you, and in rare form as well! {~,^}

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


beowulf_26
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3 posted 2000-07-29 02:20 PM


wow. I'm rather speechless.  Great poem.  I wish I could say more but I think my silence will speak for itself.  Bravo.

Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing.

beowulf_26
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4 posted 2000-07-29 02:20 PM


wow. I'm rather speechless.  Great poem.  I wish I could say more but I think my silence will speak for itself.  Bravo.

Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing.

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2000-07-29 02:23 PM


Hoot,
I agree one of your best. *L*

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2000-07-29 02:35 PM


I loved this, hoot...I vote!
serenity blaze
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7 posted 2000-07-30 04:18 PM


*bump*  just had to...loved this...
ethome
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8 posted 2000-07-30 04:27 PM


This is an excellent piece of work..very well done...good read.
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 2000-07-30 04:46 PM


Superb writing
I love this one
Liz

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2000-07-30 04:51 PM


Very intense reflective writing...James
Martie
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11 posted 2000-07-30 07:41 PM


Ruth--such a wonderful emotional piece...naked though fully clothed...love that line...click!
Denise
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12 posted 2000-07-30 10:09 PM


Very beautiful and packed with emotion! Love it!

Denise

hoot_owl_rn
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13 posted 2000-07-30 10:22 PM


Thank you everyone for such kind response to such a personal poem  
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