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linda munday
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0 posted 2000-07-29 08:52 AM


HEART’S SILENT BLOWS..... Linda Munday

A battle raged within two hearts in upper-cuts and hooks
A silent fight with blows of hate and sometimes dirty looks
The fisted hand that jabbed and punched was made of beating flesh
The heartless strikes that cut and bruised to pulpy bloody mesh

So pretence found a place to dwell to try to stop the blows
But both hearts knew in silent fear the evidence on show
No towel to throw into the ring to end the fight was found
And beaten both the fighters saw their own blood on the ground

Then wounded each they made their ways to corners for some care
But wipes of brow eluded them and they sat alone on chairs
And salty tears stung in the cuts as their hearts wrung wet with pain
The battle fought, the fight was done, and neither of them gained

Their hearts will have their needs unfilled but will remain alive
They’ll never find the needed peace and do more than survive
The ref had called the count of ten on both in bloody draw
And painful blows remain until, both face fear square on jaw


© Copyright 2000 Linda Munday - All Rights Reserved
beowulf_26
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since 1999-06-29
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1 posted 2000-07-29 11:40 AM


simply wonderful.  You found such an accurate way of describing the pain and fighting between people and illustrated excellently what they get for it.
serenity blaze
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2 posted 2000-07-30 03:30 PM


Great metaphor, linda...I really liked the flow and the theme of this one...and the empty feeling of a "draw"...superb!
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