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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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Sinking Love's loser adrift Needful of a change in ships This one is sinking Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Very well done. I particularly like your middle line. This says a great deal. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Acutely felt Jamie...I've tried to do these little beauties and just can't get the hang of them...tis why I appreciate the poets that capture so much with so little. Great work~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This invokes many images sir. Excellent poem!  [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 07-28-2000).] |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh I absolutely love this one!!! How you can say so much with so few words is simply a wonder!! Great job!!  --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
You speak volumes here. Keep up the great work!! LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Heard that loud and clear. I keep telling myself to try one of these but I am with Bdc on this.....I just cant seem to get there yet. Wonderful. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Jamie... Throw you a lifeline.. Bail out of that sinking ship.. Let us swim to shore.. (Hope you don't mind, I loved your Haiku, but I just couldn't resist temptation!!) ~~ To Live is to Give ~~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Jamie, Love this, so much said. same as sunny, could not resist temptation Sinking but not sunk Embark your destination Sail toward the stars Maree |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jamie...this is so evocative....makes me want to swim to you. never say never |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Hey Jamie grab the line and I'll pull you to shore Jamie great little piece, lovely image Tracie~< !signature--> Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 07-30-2000).] |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~So little words but so much said. Wonderfull~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Prometheus~ MayDay ! MayDay ! cried The signal broadcast around Sinking heart rescued Guess you just got us all going with inspiration here. Wonderful message of the heart. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Wonderful, you said so much in those few words. Are there any lifeboats? Linda M. p.s. How did you get so many responses in such a short time? Has this poem been moved from another forum? |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Gee... so many to thank..... I hope you kind souls will let me off the hook with one giant THANK YOU to each of you. You are one more group of fine poets. Thanks again Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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