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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA 
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Two Hearts < !signature-->Two hearts beat in rhythm With the pulsing of the stars; One happy, strong, and cheerful, The other quieted by scars. Two hearts beat together, Resounding into the night; Speaking truths unto each other Beyond the breadth of mortal sight. Two hearts beat out a chorus Underneath the black velvet sky; And the heart full of scars Tears of love begins to cry. Two hearts beat a melody Of faith and hope that heals; Of friendship, trust, and courage And the empty void they fill. Two hearts beat on forever Through the darkness, into the dawn, And as the sun slowly rises, These two hearts beat as one. ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. [This message has been edited by TerryW (edited 07-26-2000).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
These are words I wish I had written. It's so true that although one heart is scarred and hurting, they can always rise again and meld with another. Beautiful work, Terry. Thank you. Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellent poem Terry... regards, sudhir |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
This is really very well written Terry! One of my favourites from you..... Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Terry, this is a wonderfully written/expressed piece, though I do find one rought area.- the third and fourth lines of the third stanza; "And the heart full of scars Tears of love begins to cry." These would flow much smoother if you did something like: "And in the heart full of scars Tears of love begin to cry." Other than that...perfect....and even if you decide not to make a change of any kind to these line...I loved the piece. jwesley |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Elizabeth~ Thank you for your kind words, dear! And thank you for enjoying! Love Ya~ Sudhir~ Glad you enjoyed it, my friend! Marina~ Thank you, dear. You know I always feel better when I hear from you! Love Ya~ jwesley~ Glad you liked it, my friend. You know, I, too, thought about the change you suggested, but for some reason it just sounds more powerful to me in the transposed state in which I wrote it originally. But I apreciate your suggestion! Good to hear from you! Love to All!  ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Two hearts beat on forever Through the darkness, into the dawn, And as the sun slowly rises, These two hearts beat as one. Terry-these alone say it all and with the other words added it takes it beyond heaven. Beautiful pure sincerity. Loved it. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Terry...What a beautiful love-filled poem! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Terry* This is absolutely beautiful!!!! The tenderness of this piece is amazing...the message, the idea, the imagery....perfection~ Two hearts beat out a chorus Underneath the black velvet sky; And the heart full of scars Tears of love begins to cry. Two hearts beat a melody Of faith and hope that heals; Of friendship, trust, and courage And the empty void they fill I'm soaring on a cloud with this one!!! Only one little thing wrong with it......where's my submit box????? |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Terry, this poem brought a lump to my throat with its intimate but familiar theme. So nicely written! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Terry, I love this poem. It makes me think of some one very special in my life. I'm glad I took the time to read it. Rosepetals25 |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
very nice ... great rhythm ... thanks. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Terry, this poem is AWESOME... melodic and just pure poetry in motion I agree...this one of your sweetest and finest....and you should submit this little gem for the book!!! either way...its going in my library file wonderful writing kind poet jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Mark~ Thank you, my friend. I'm glad you liked it. And I appreciate your kind words. Martie~ Thank you, my friend. Butterflies~ I am so glad that you got a chance to read this one. As always, you make my day glow even brighter with your lovely comments! I am glad that I could give you a gentle breeze to get up to that cloud on, but bring a little moon dust back for me, my friend Love Ya~ Claire~ Thank you, my dear. You guys always make me feel so good -- I wouldn't trade any of you for anything in the world! Rosepetals25~ Thank you for reading this one. I am glad you liked it. And thank you for your sweet comments! MA Miller~ Thank you, my friend. The beauty of poetry is sharing it with those you love so that they may enjoy it, too! JanetMarie~ There you are, my dear! I was hoping I would get to hear from you! Thank you, but you guys are gonna make me blush!  I may have to submit it for the book, now!! I appreciate your lovely words, as always, my friend. It is good to hear from you again! (I'll try to stay close by for a while!) Love You All!!!!! ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Boydstun New Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 6 |
Terry, this is another beautiful, sensitive poem. "Two hearts beat as one"--this is as it should be. I enjoyed this poem just as I have enjoyed others you have written. Thank you. Martha |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Terry a lovely poem beautiful thoughts on the unity of two hearts. really enjoyed the poem. "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Scars fade when love is real...this so touched my heart... never say never |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Boydstun~ Thank you, Mom. As always, your comments are making me blush! Brian~ Thank you for your kind words, my friend! Paula~ I am glad you liked it, dear! Thank you! Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Ok, Butterflies~ You can stop yelling at me now. I submitted it for the book. (I'm glad you liked it that much though, my friend!) Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
beautiful words beautiful emotions "Life is like music; it must be composed by ear, feeling, and instinct, not by rule."~ Samuel Butler ~ |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Tess~ Thank you so much, my friend. I appreciate your kind words. ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
WOOOOOOOO HOOOOOOOOO I'm smiling rainbows today Terry.....this is a gem and it's an honor to vote........and who me.....yell?? Don't you see this halo  |
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Boydstun New Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 6 |
Im very happy, Terry, that you have submitted this for the book. I think it will be an excellent addition. Martha |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
back to vote and to SWOON some more so pleased you submitted... we like it when our poets SUBMIT when we tell them too  its an awesome poem Terry...truly take care poet extraordinare jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Butterflies~ I know you are smiling rainbows, dear, because it's raining color here! Boydstun~ Thank you, Mom! Janet Marie~ LOL! You only have to ask, my dear! Love you all~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
This describes a great friendship I have. Thank you for posting this. [This message has been edited by angel girl (edited 07-27-2000).] |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Angel Girl~ Thank you for reading. And I am glad that you enjoyed it! ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TerryW~ Can feel the beat in this one. Or rather make that 'two' ! 'Two hearts beat a melody Of faith and hope that heals; Of friendship, trust, and courage And the empty void they fill.' Friendship keeps the hearts together. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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