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ma miller
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0 posted 07-24-2000 02:59 PM       View Profile for ma miller   Email ma miller   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for ma miller

the sands of when ...

when sand castles wilt tenderly away
oceans weep their salty tears
never the intent to call harm's way
the helpless sea controls no fears

a fortress built to stand the test
only to return to the million grains
reaching fingers of water infests
sprawling canals destroys in veins

start the falling upon itself
a slow decay drops walls of grit
swallowed up by a gushing wealth
of water's flushing deepened pit

smoothing shore bids retreating tide
a fare thee well and a return again
return when sand castles do reside
to cry a tear for the sands of when


M.A. Miller
07.24.00


My calling before me, let quill be my offering;
For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive.

M.A.



[This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 07-24-2000).]
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Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 07-24-2000 03:01 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

smoothing shore bids retreating tide
a fare thee well and a return again
return when sand castles do reside
to cry a tear for the sands of when
.....
What lines...

What a poem!!!

Amazed and dazed, I applaud this one...

regards to you MA Miller,
sudhir

serenity blaze
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2 posted 07-24-2000 03:04 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

This is exceptional mark, I loved the imagery here....sands of time, and an ocean of regret no less...aching...
Paula Finn
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3 posted 07-24-2000 03:33 PM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

I love the water and this poem just SPEAKS to me...

never say never
Gossamerwings
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4 posted 07-24-2000 03:34 PM       View Profile for Gossamerwings   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gossamerwings

Great writing here.
I much enjoyed the read!

Keep on doing it.  


Gossamerwings ;)
Sunshine
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5 posted 07-24-2000 03:35 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Oh, this is splendid...

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ

Kit McCallum
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6 posted 07-24-2000 03:41 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Wonderfully descriptive MA!  Your imagery is superb in this beautiful verse!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
ma miller
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7 posted 07-24-2000 09:23 PM       View Profile for ma miller   Email ma miller   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ma miller

of all my posts so far to Passions, this is the one i least expected to get much of a reaction out of ... a rather simple theme, but serenity hit the nail on the head ... it's really about time slipping away as much as about literal sand castles ... thank you all so much for taking time to read ...
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beautiful and sad
 
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