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X Angel
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0 posted 2000-07-23 05:11 PM


my first attempt, please be gentle!


soft sunlight
cool gentle breezes
waves crashing

~*~

shell seeking
foreign treasure trove
ocean gifts

~*~

barefoot days
with sand tickled toes
feather clouds

~*~

gulls overhead
they scream and soar on
thermal lofts

~*~

autumn soon
cherish sunfilled days
while they last

~*~

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"Our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything."
--William Shakespeare




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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2000-07-23 05:22 PM


Oh Yes...You have captured this beautifully...be gentle?  no need...lovely X angel...no more need be said...
Rex Allen McCoy
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2 posted 2000-07-23 05:23 PM


love to read
you write so lovely
I'm impressed

Rex

Parker
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3 posted 2000-07-23 05:27 PM


X, these were wonderfull. I just got back from the ocean, and your making me miss it already. Somehow the third one, makes me picture you walking in the sand, though I have no pics, maybe I need some....  

Parker

X Angel
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4 posted 2000-07-23 05:36 PM


why thanks all! you make me want to try more senryus!

and Parker....uhm who d'ya think that is standing with the horse? Uhh nope not my brother.....tis me!
silly!
;Þ~*
~H

Parker
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5 posted 2000-07-23 07:19 PM


Well, I was hoping for some pics of your riding the horse, or walking on the beach, or ..... whatever you can come up with.  

Your brother looks kind of sweet, if thats him..  

Parker

tracie66
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6 posted 2000-07-23 07:30 PM


Beautiful is the first word that came to mind when reading this...and I say well done  
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-07-23 08:38 PM


XAngel~

Summer filled pages
Memories last forever
Better than photos

Sand between your toes
Castles wash away with waves
Prints left in the sand

Seagulls overhead
Flock on wings spread in glide
Calling card on head  

Parker rushes in
Shares umbrella with brother
You ride off on horse  

Polaroid the days
Of summers sweet in album
Autumn comes too soon


*Your Senryu's were perfectly lovely !
~*Marge*~





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X Angel
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8 posted 2000-07-23 08:42 PM


omg Marge I am gonna die...the thought of Parker and my brother snuggling under an umbrella about made me lose it!

good'un girlie
I like yer lil poetry happenin there too!
~H

Balladeer
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9 posted 2000-07-23 08:56 PM


WOW! You do senryu's, too??? I didn't even know you were ambidextruous!!!! These are great  
Parker
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10 posted 2000-07-23 09:23 PM


tisk tisk Marge, I may have to bite you for that one. lol

X Angel please get that thought out of your mind, id be riding off with you.  

Parker

X Angel
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11 posted 2000-07-23 09:27 PM


uhm Parker?  
one teensy problem....my horse is 22, cranky, and doesn't ride double....
>;oÞ~*
~Heather

PS 'Deer...yeah I been ambidextrous for years now ya nut! *whap*

Janet Marie
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12 posted 2000-07-23 10:54 PM


well I'd like to thank you for thanking me then  
these are GREAT!!!!! no need to ask for mercy LOL
im so glad you were inspired by mine to try
these...as it was for the same reason I wanted to...I read one of Michael G's
and enjoyed it so much I wanted to learn.
that is the gift of here, we all inspire and teach each other new things...
Nan will be so proud  
enjoyed a day of summer senyru fun.
thanks angel-girl
jm


There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~

Nan
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13 posted 2000-07-23 11:20 PM


Yep - Proud, I am... She's ambi-senryuous....

and I DO have pics....

Michael G
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14 posted 2000-07-23 11:59 PM


Oh yeah! These are good, and are they not fun!  Loved them...........
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