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My Wife Awake!

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ethome
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After the first creeping rays scan the meadows
with white lightwaves of morning over greensward
gliding like a spirit they conquer silhouettes.
Without fading and with reckless destination
they reach the tempered sands and reveal reflections
past the glassworks and at last to images made
by breath, heaving in dream zones of light slumber.
Inside the walls there stands the dark figures
where, collecting their jizz, they conspire mystery,
illusions of connected conjure.
They stretch now and begin to move, so fast they go
in crowds, and at last in a brilliant madness -
blazing butterscotch swords dissect them into
splaying icons round sunlit kins.
And always music, playing out of reach,
a rooster crowing, cracksman of sweet sleep
sifting through dreamland pastures in the mind
and flushing out visions of Eldorado.
The cockcrow of choice causing bedfellows and soul singers to battle for the beauty's heart.
At last, a murmer, late for morning work
whispers from the crest of the cortex beyond
where finally a small embyro of conscious
light feathers the flickering lids of life.
The like coiled spring set free she bolts straight up to -
the boondoggle of a button to push, before a smile
breaks honey sweet across her face - my wife awake!
© Copyright 2000 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 07-22-2000 04:25 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

After the first creeping rays scan the meadows
with white lightwaves of morning over greensward
gliding like a spirit they conquer silhouettes.
Without fading and with reckless destination
they reach the tempered sands and reveal reflections
past the glassworks and at last to images made
by breath, heaving in dream zones of light slumber.
Inside the walls there stands the dark figures
where, collecting their jizz, they conspire mystery,
illusions of connected conjure.
They stretch now and begin to move, so fast they go
in crowds, and at last in a brilliant madness -
blazing butterscotch swords dissect them into
splaying icons round sunlit kins.
And always music, playing out of reach,
a rooster crowing, cracksman of sweet sleep
sifting through dreamland pastures in the mind
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well, i need to come to where you are,
cause it dont look like this out my window
in the morn  
my goodness E, this is lovley
what amazing imagery ...
thank you for such a wonderful read.
later-sweet-sunrise-gator
jm


There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


2 posted 07-22-2000 04:33 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

I'm with JM...I should have look for a house with a better view.  This was wonderful and the imagery sparks desires and visions that are nothing short of sweet.
ethome
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Thank you Janet and Mark. It's true it can be quite beautiful here sometimes although I'm sure it's the same where you are.
Paula Finn
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4 posted 07-27-2000 02:16 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

Such a view my friend.

never say never
Toddles
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5 posted 07-27-2000 04:01 AM       View Profile for Toddles   Email Toddles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toddles

Ethome:

Very visual and rich with metaphor!

ethome
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Thank you very much Paula and Todd for dropping in for the read.
Gossamerwings
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*sigh*   I really like this.

Gossamerwings ;)
Martie
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ethome--The sensory feel of this is so vivid and the language so well placed and beautiful...a truely lovely poem!
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 07-27-2000 06:54 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

You certainly show your talents in this piece, full of images and interesting phrases, Very well written, my friend
Liz
Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now


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Wow ethome, this is truly inspiring. I like the style, and the words. Very nice, very nice.
ethome
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11 posted 07-27-2000 08:46 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Thank you Gossamer for stopping in for the read, always nice to hear from you.

Thank you Martie for dropping in and enjoying
like I enjoyed that "Envelope" poem of yours

Thank you kindly Elizabeth I always enjoy hearing from you. I sent you an email the other day and something went wrong so I'll send it again...thanks for yours it was more than wonderful...I hope you posted that here at least once.

Thanks Bill I appreciate you taking the time to stop in for the read and your words of encouragement..I'll be around to see you as soon as I can....
Lone Wolf
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ethome,

Sweet and romantic writing here my friend.  What a lovely view.  

Great descriptive writing!

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats
ethome
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Thank you Lone wolf for stopping by for the read I'm glad you enjoyed.
Seymour Tabin
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Ethome,
Plenty of paint and a good read. Enjoyed
ethome
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15 posted 07-28-2000 08:35 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Thank you Seymour I'm glad you liked the paint.
passing shadows
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nice one Eric
 
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