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My Wife Awake!
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My Wife Awake! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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After the first creeping rays scan the meadows with white lightwaves of morning over greensward gliding like a spirit they conquer silhouettes. Without fading and with reckless destination they reach the tempered sands and reveal reflections past the glassworks and at last to images made by breath, heaving in dream zones of light slumber. Inside the walls there stands the dark figures where, collecting their jizz, they conspire mystery, illusions of connected conjure. They stretch now and begin to move, so fast they go in crowds, and at last in a brilliant madness - blazing butterscotch swords dissect them into splaying icons round sunlit kins. And always music, playing out of reach, a rooster crowing, cracksman of sweet sleep sifting through dreamland pastures in the mind and flushing out visions of Eldorado. The cockcrow of choice causing bedfellows and soul singers to battle for the beauty's heart. At last, a murmer, late for morning work whispers from the crest of the cortex beyond where finally a small embyro of conscious light feathers the flickering lids of life. The like coiled spring set free she bolts straight up to - the boondoggle of a button to push, before a smile breaks honey sweet across her face - my wife awake! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
After the first creeping rays scan the meadows with white lightwaves of morning over greensward gliding like a spirit they conquer silhouettes. Without fading and with reckless destination they reach the tempered sands and reveal reflections past the glassworks and at last to images made by breath, heaving in dream zones of light slumber. Inside the walls there stands the dark figures where, collecting their jizz, they conspire mystery, illusions of connected conjure. They stretch now and begin to move, so fast they go in crowds, and at last in a brilliant madness - blazing butterscotch swords dissect them into splaying icons round sunlit kins. And always music, playing out of reach, a rooster crowing, cracksman of sweet sleep sifting through dreamland pastures in the mind ======================== well, i need to come to where you are, cause it dont look like this out my window in the morn  my goodness E, this is lovley what amazing imagery ... thank you for such a wonderful read. later-sweet-sunrise-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I'm with JM...I should have look for a house with a better view. This was wonderful and the imagery sparks desires and visions that are nothing short of sweet. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Janet and Mark. It's true it can be quite beautiful here sometimes although I'm sure it's the same where you are. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Such a view my friend. never say never |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Ethome: Very visual and rich with metaphor! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you very much Paula and Todd for dropping in for the read. |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
*sigh* I really like this.  Gossamerwings ;) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--The sensory feel of this is so vivid and the language so well placed and beautiful...a truely lovely poem! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You certainly show your talents in this piece, full of images and interesting phrases, Very well written, my friend Liz |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Wow ethome, this is truly inspiring. I like the style, and the words. Very nice, very nice. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Gossamer for stopping in for the read, always nice to hear from you. Thank you Martie for dropping in and enjoying like I enjoyed that "Envelope" poem of yours Thank you kindly Elizabeth I always enjoy hearing from you. I sent you an email the other day and something went wrong so I'll send it again...thanks for yours it was more than wonderful...I hope you posted that here at least once. Thanks Bill I appreciate you taking the time to stop in for the read and your words of encouragement..I'll be around to see you as soon as I can.... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
ethome, Sweet and romantic writing here my friend. What a lovely view.  Great descriptive writing! LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Lone wolf for stopping by for the read I'm glad you enjoyed. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Plenty of paint and a good read. Enjoyed |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Seymour I'm glad you liked the paint. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice one Eric |
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