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A sad poem..but what do u think?
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A sad poem..but what do u think? |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
you and me our love only in the fetal stage still growing still blooming in our palms suddenly rocky roads and violent storms salty tears freezing in the cold wind of January I don't understand you tell me to forget about you and our dreams die in the womb our love malnourished shriveling in my belly you and me a stillborn love gone before it even began to live |
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Dragon's Soul Junior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 25 |
I love it I love the imagery of the unborn child a great poem all around |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh Jennie...this causes an ache deep down in my soul |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Yes this is indeed a sad piece...hope everything begins to clear for you and you can love again. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sari New Member
since 2000-07-21
Posts 2 |
That poem touched me deep inside, it says what words usually can't. It shows me that i am not alone in the way i feel. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I think you are right it's very sad. Well written, I love the metaphour. Just great work! take care..........ethome............. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I see a missed opportunity...sometimes the door is still open...the timing perhaps...who knows....I hope for the best for you....James |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Exceptionally melancholy. Now it begs the question: fact or fiction? Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
Sadly enough, it's fact. But it's only an expression of a time in my life. I am really okay! Thank you everyone for the replies above- I love to know how people are touched by poetry. "We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Jennie May, What an absolutely different way to look at a relationship. Very nice, and please continue to write and post. |
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