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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
When the wind blows the heartache away I'll be happy and free again someday. Riding high in the sky No more room for goodbye When the wind blows the heartache away. When the rains wash the tears from my face Leaving my eyes bright and showing no trace Of the pain that I bear No more doubts no more cares When the rains wash the tears from my face. When the sun casts its light on my heart Showing me theres a fresh start To a love that is real To a love that will heal When the sun casts its light on my heart. < !signature--> never say never [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 07-22-2000).] |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Great poem of struggle. I think you should call it "Rebirth". But whatever floats your boat my friend. Good luck and keep them coming.  Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~This is a great poem....I agree with Xeonox..however with a slight change...how about...'Rebirth With the Elements'....Just a suggestion. Really enjoyed this piece!!!~ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This is a most delightful poem to read but I'm no good with coming up with a title *Sorry* great suggestions from the others Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beautiful piece. I like the suggestions from the others for a title but I also had flash through me "Natures Cleansing" while I was reading it. But of course I am a nature nut anyway. Great write |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Xeonox...that is a good title...let me think on it a little more tho...thanks for reading Beth...thanks and you have given me good ideas for a title and i appreciate the help tracie...thats the one thing I usually have NO problem with but this poem just flowed out so fast a title just got lost. Mark...having read your poems its easy to tell you love nature and I do like your suggestion... never say never |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Paula....... I really did like this one!!! I'm a nature nut, sort of, and this one was good. Just a thought about the title... How about "Natural Remedy" Love received is equal to love given! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ Well .... because I definitley got the feeling ..... how about 'Windblown' ? Nice writing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like this too.. And I'm terrible at titles..how about "When"? |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I think I'd go with "When" I enjoyed the poem very much it's a smoothly delivered romantic work. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Paula, As soon as I read this poem it was "Heartache Goodbye". Thanks for posting it so that I could stop by and read it. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
sunny1... I like that title...and I appreciate your words Marge...thanks...so many good titles its hard to choose Poet deVine...that sounds good...I like short and sweet< !signature--> never say never [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 07-23-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
ethome...thank you I am glad you enjoyed this Bill...I really like that one...so many wonderful suggestions and now I have to choose...LOL never say never |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
title suggestion ... "Weathering When" or, you could get cute and call it ... "Weathering Hearts" (on second, don't do that) in any event, it's a beautiful piece ...< !signature--> My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A. [This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 07-23-2000).] |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Paula...beautiful writing How about Cast No More Doubt or Cast Away Doubt ~~softly Maureen |
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Zion Junior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 33Melbourne Australia |
I am not a poet in any sense of the word I write what I feel and how I feel your words appealed to me May I suggest you call it Tears in The Sun or perhaps Bright Eyes |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
MA...LOL yah maybe we should leave "Weathering Hearts" alone. I am glad you liked this tho. MMoonchild...thanks for reading so many great suggestions...now i just have to pick one! Zion...after the beautiful poem you posted to doubt you have a poets soul...well just DONT. Thanks for the suggestions. never say never |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Paula I'm back I came back for a second look and I came up with a title *seasonal change* but oh I do like MA MILLER's *Weathering Hearts* See Ya Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Just keep them coming Tracie I will make up my mind soon lol never say never |
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