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Within Your Words

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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


0 posted 07-21-2000 09:48 AM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mark Bohannan

Within Your Words

Within your words...
I travel the depths of your soul
As I stumble across a broken heart
I think to myself...
I can relate to that

Within you words...
I am given a poet's dreams
Rainbows and Oceans, and pots of gold
Given over to grace I say...
I can accept your gift

Within you words...
I watch as true love blossoms
Dancing eyes and picnic lunches
I yell out in glee...
I rejoice in your love

Within your words...
I live a fantasy and fairytale
Twisting the visions to become my own
So I shed a happy tear...
For I've just been touched

Within your words...
I may never really know
The pain or torment nor the joy encased
Though you share a little
I know there is much more hidden

Mark Bohannan


**a little different style for me.  Hope it works!
© Copyright 2000 Mark Bohannan - All Rights Reserved
Walter Poe
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1 posted 07-21-2000 10:05 AM       View Profile for Walter Poe   Email Walter Poe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Walter Poe

Words are the source of all after all

In the begining there was a word




Oh Danny boy, the pipes, the pipes are calling
From glen to glen, and down the mountain side
The summer's gone, and all the roses falling
'Tis
Janet Marie
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2 posted 07-21-2000 10:08 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

it works... and works beautifully
yes...the true magic of poetry is the
gifts we find with-in the words of
all the emotions and graceful images we
discover here each day.
lovely tribute to poetry Mark.
later-fellow-poetry-worshiper-gator  
jm

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~
ma miller
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3 posted 07-21-2000 10:12 AM       View Profile for ma miller   Email ma miller   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ma miller

another winner here, Mark ... the repetitive first line works well since all the subsequent lines in each stanza are so divergent (maybe that should be left for the "Critical" board?) ... great read ...
Martie
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4 posted 07-21-2000 10:57 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

It works!  It works!  Within your words I see a tender spirit that listens.
serenity blaze
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5 posted 07-21-2000 11:02 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

It works for me too..this is really good Mark...
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


6 posted 07-21-2000 11:33 AM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

Walter-you are so right and it amazes me still the power simple words can have.

JM-glad it works for you and Yes I worship poetry( A TAD)LOL

MA-thanks for the read and so glad ou enjoyed it.

Martie-I do my best but you can never really be sure.

serenity-thank you once again to your responses
Trew
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7 posted 07-21-2000 11:44 AM       View Profile for Trew   Email Trew   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Trew

Oh ya, that worked.
Even those inspired enough to attempt to put their emotions into words very rarely are capable of handing out more than a glimpse.
You wrote a great one here!
MMoonchild
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8 posted 07-21-2000 11:45 AM       View Profile for MMoonchild   Email MMoonchild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit MMoonchild's Home Page   View IP for MMoonchild

Beautiful, Mark...repetition in poetry  gets the feeling and depth across..

I use it often..and this was  so nice..not  knowing your previous style...
~~soft smiles
Maureen


You Give To Me

you give to me
the morning sun to
pocket in my heart
to carry 'til the nighttime calls
in sleep, warmth to impart

you give to me
the simplest smile
though not so simple 'cause
when e'er your face appears to me
my heatbeat seems to pause

you give to me
the coupon that says
"love you ever more"
no date of expiration there
"forever" words so pure
and when you whisper on the wind
the sounds of feelings true

you give to me
the best there is
for what you give is "you".
M
2k


Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


9 posted 07-21-2000 12:22 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

Trew-thank you.  This was for a special friend.

Maureen-Thank you for the beautiful poem.  A better reply than the gift of poetry does not exist.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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10 posted 07-21-2000 12:28 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry


Mark*
This poem is absolutely perfect.  Poetry whether it be our own or someone elses allows us to travel to a place within that perhaps we wouldn't otherwise look at or feel.  When we stumble upon those poems or poets that seem to speak from our own hearts and souls......well there's nothing more beautiful.    
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


11 posted 07-21-2000 12:41 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

It is the beauty of your words that I so often travel and I thank you from the bottom of my heart for allowing me those travels.  I know that you for one really do see the perils of the travels and the misguided tours that often take place.
A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart


12 posted 07-21-2000 12:43 PM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Mark,
within your words I feel your heart speaking loud volumes...of longing for true love and dreams come true! (psst..I like your words,
I like to read them!
JulieAnn
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13 posted 07-21-2000 03:22 PM       View Profile for JulieAnn   Email JulieAnn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JulieAnn

This reminds me a bit of everything I feel about passions.....stumbling through these pages filled with everyone baring their souls....we relate to some.....feel sorrow for others.....I think this would be a great tribute to passions!! However i do not know what YOUR meaning was behind it.....Just a thought.....Liked it alot....Second favorite??????  

Julie :)


Lone Wolf
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14 posted 07-21-2000 04:35 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Mark,

I think you did a fine job here.  Much meaning in these words.  I could feel the emotions coming out.  Nice writing.

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


15 posted 07-22-2000 01:17 AM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

RH-As I like to read yours.  Thanks for the read and your kindness.

JulieAnn-You are on the right track and I do so love to read all the wonderful poems here.  The problem is finding enough time to read and reply to as many as I want to.Thanks to you.

LW-Thank you so much.  I have a true passion for poetry and the emotions are MOSTLY for that the rest are for a someone who sees something the way I do for the most part.  Glad you enjoyed it and thank you for the read and compliment.
Paula Finn
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16 posted 07-22-2000 04:22 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

Mark...the depth and imagery in this poem is superb..twisting the visions to become my own....

never say never
ethome
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17 posted 07-22-2000 06:41 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

AH there's still a mystery within the words, that makes the poem even more enchanting.
Keep learning about the person and finding something delightful makes the road to true love easier to travel.......
Great poem Mark, I really enjoyed.
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


18 posted 07-22-2000 08:27 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Mark, I appreciate the sentiment a lot! Within us all there is so much to say...some can, some cannot...

you have done that well here...

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ

Elizabeth Santos
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19 posted 07-22-2000 08:51 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Mark,
Believe me, it works
This is a wonderful poem with the title pleasantly carried through the poem.
A very enjoyable poem
Liz
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


20 posted 07-22-2000 09:15 AM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

Paula-twist away.Thank you for the superb.

ethome-don't you just love a great mystery?

Sunshine-Thank  you so much.

Liz-so happy that you found it to work. Thanks
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21 posted 07-22-2000 09:36 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

MarkB~

Within your words a sigh
softly fell upon my heart's need.
I find an embracing comfort
within the tender words I read.

You ask me 'Does it work ?'
I reply to you ...
"If it ain't broke - don't fix it !"
Tenderly your words woo !

Smiling here !
Thank you.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Kit McCallum
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22 posted 07-22-2000 09:41 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"Within your words", you have painted such a beautiful picture of the many feelings and emotions expressed, written and read in these walls daily.  Absolutely beautiful Mark ... this flows just wonderfully!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song


23 posted 07-22-2000 10:21 AM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

Marge-you have made my day.  Thank you so much.

Kit-That means more to me than you will ever know and I thank you dearly.
Meadowmuse
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24 posted 07-22-2000 12:16 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Mark, it works...exceptionally so.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


 
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