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Cold and Alone

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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 07-20-2000 06:24 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry


Cold, Alone ....void of life
Taken, Used....turn the knife
Tears of ice fall like rain
Remove the power to cause me pain

Iíll live here in the dark
Remembrance my eternal spark
Cold, Alone....void of life
From your hands I take the knife

Trust and love did once exist
A second look I will resist
Taken, Used .....left to cry
Cold, Alone....the feelings die

No more tears will spill today
Closing eyes....you walk away
Taken, Used....the knife was turned
Heart to Stone....lesson learned

© Copyright 2000 Butterflies_dont_cry - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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1 posted 07-20-2000 06:30 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

May I join you in a heartfelt cry?  This is so sad to see one turn to shelter but I do understand the need to go.  Wonderfully written.
brian madden
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2 posted 07-20-2000 06:31 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

BDC A HUGE HUG. I wish their words I could say, to express how I feel about this poem but when reading something so raw I am left lost for words. All I want to do is rush to your side and ask "are you ok?" then give you a give hug. I only wish my arms could reach that far. anyway take care my friend,
I hope the rays of light shine down soon until then love and concern, brian.  


why must we pray
screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith
wayoutwalt
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3 posted 07-20-2000 06:31 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

applauding here yuh i likes this lots it emotional very so
Janet Marie
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4 posted 07-20-2000 07:06 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Tears of ice fall like rain
Remove the power to cause me pain

Iíll live here in the dark
Remembrance my eternal spark
Cold, Alone....void of life
From your hands I take the knife

Trust and love did once exist
A second look I will resist
========================
No more tears will spill today
Closing eyes....you walk away
Taken, Used....the knife was turned
Heart to Stone....lesson learned
==========================

we learn the lessons of the heart the hard way...sometimes we learn them more than once...but in time we do learn from our-
OR-their mistakes and we grow stronger and wiser with each tear...
your poetry of late makes my point for me...
written from that place deep with-in my SS
and by writing it out...
we let it out..let it go...
You know....I know...hearts know
time to go fly in the sunshine sweet butterfly  
love ya
JM



There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~
Sunnyone
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5 posted 07-20-2000 07:20 PM       View Profile for Sunnyone   Email Sunnyone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunnyone's Home Page   View IP for Sunnyone

Butterflies....

     This was beautifully written and I felt
     the pain in your heart.
           It's so hard to watch love
                  walk away...

         I do love your work so very much!


~~~~~Live for Today~~~~~
taste every single moment


Bill Charles
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Butterflies_dont_cry,
This is so touching and sad.. Butterflies are not suppose to be sad. All I could think of was wanting to help, but a hug is all I can send. A tear came down, even to my eyes. Very nice Butterflies_dont_cry, but a smile on your face, not a tear.
Kit McCallum
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7 posted 07-20-2000 08:26 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Oh Butterflies ... such powerful and raw emotions. I ached just reading this verse. Beautifully written from the sorrows of the heart.

Best wishes and HUGS,
/Kit
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8 posted 07-20-2000 08:46 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

butterfly: I can relate almost too well to this poem...it brought back feelings that left from me not so long ago. I guess you never really forget. Thanks for sharing yours.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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Mark* Inside is the one place that no one
can hurt you.....of course that means no one
can help you either.  As for the cry...sure
thing. It's quiet comfort when someone
understands...I appreciate it~

Brian* Awe...my thanks to you.  A hug of the heart
is well received as well...I think my muse was
having a bad day...tripping down memory lane. Thank
you for your kindness and your gentle heart~

Walt* many to yuh thanks  

Janet* I'm beginning to think that is the
ONLY way I get it!  As for wise.....after
all the tears I should be a millionaire call
Regis quick!!!  

Sunny* Thank you for reading and for you
kind comments, they are always appreciated~

Bill*  Thanks for the hug.....the smile will
come..it always does after the rain  

Kit* You are always a ray of sunshine!  Thank
you so much for reading~

PS* No I don't think you ever forget pain
that deep....you can tuck it away..but not
forget.  Thank you for reading...so sorry
that you relate to this~




[This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 07-20-2000).]
Lone Wolf
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10 posted 07-20-2000 11:36 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

BDC,

Ouch, I can feel the knife.  Powerful words my friend.  What images.  Great writing.  Take care.  **HUGS**

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats
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11 posted 07-21-2000 12:41 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

ButterfliesDC~
You touch me with your thoughts.
I hope all of our *hugs* touch you.

Seems to me that a heart as loving as yours deserves more ...
just more.

Love you
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Jaysun C
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B_D_C - L_O_L


that damn knife seams to find its way into too many of our lives

mine was old and rusty and left a big ol scar

your words speak the feelings i wish i never felt
though as i read them my heart will still
melt );

than you
tracie66
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Beautiful sweet butterflies even though it was sad but hey I don't believe for one minute your heart would ever turn to stone well at least I would hope not  
Love Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Michael G
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14 posted 07-21-2000 04:28 AM       View Profile for Michael G   Email Michael G   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Michael G's Home Page   View IP for Michael G

OOooohhhhhh, I wish there were words to take away this pain, but you are not alone in here............
EagleOne
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My dear friend! This is awesome writing, powerful, painful, emotive, and straight from the heart as always. By hanging onto the memories you have learned the lessons and become stronger and wiser. You know my shoulder is always available, take care!

God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown


JamesMichael
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Looks like some lingering pain has stopped by for a little visit...I believe that we do learn lessons from our mistakes or our pain...in my case I realize that I need to be more dedicated and devoted when I am actively in a  relationship...embrace it and value it...when its gone its too late..James
Butterflies_dont_cry
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17 posted 07-21-2000 12:42 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

L.W.*  I will if you will   ((AW hugs))~

Marge* I'm not sure if I deserve more but I all the hugs are well received and felt from the heart~

Jaysun*  Welcome to Passions!  Sorry for the pain and the scar...I hope healing comes soon.

Tracie* Sometimes I wish it would..lol but it keeps hurting to let me know it's very much alive. **AW hugs** sweet girl!

Michael G* I'm sure I'm not...my heart goes out to those that feel it too.

Eagle* I know.....it should be soggy by now...lol  

James* The advice from someone who knows all to well I see......thank you.

To All of you*  Thank you from the bottom of my heart for the kindness and the hugs....how could I ever STAY sad with all of you    
JulieAnn
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18 posted 07-21-2000 02:49 PM       View Profile for JulieAnn   Email JulieAnn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JulieAnn

Don't be sad BDC....not like your usual writing but I still liked it.....great work!!!  

Julie :)


Christopher
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19 posted 07-23-2000 10:50 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Remembrance my eternal spark

I know this!

You've written with a dreary pen m'friend. Inky dark and full of the poignant emotions that we've all known even if we weren't able to express them! You've done it magnificently here... and I really liked your usage of ellipsis' to segregate in the lines!  
Butterflies_dont_cry
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20 posted 07-23-2000 11:05 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Julie* As always your kindness is appreciated

Christopher* Dark enough for you    Thank's S.C.'s
passing shadows
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I feel this deep
 
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