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The Lighthouse
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The Lighthouse |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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This was originally in the corner as an answer to Lost Dreamer's Challenge on tranquillity... but since then I changed a few things around... wanted your view on this one... so here it is... Thanks in advance for your thoughts, Sudhir ---------- The Lighthouse A Sailor's Symbol of Trusted Quietude On high seas, settled an eventide At the faraway watchtower looked I, Flashing signals, lend peace inside, Sending Morse-coded lights, to the sky The Marathon Runner's rushed breaths, Now quietened, calmed by timed lights From distant lighthouse, though oppressed By gusts of cold frosty winds of the night. A victim of summer's heat, and winter's ice, Or even the fiery raging seas waves' hit Be it summer equinox or winter's solstice, Be it a lovely full moon or her eclipsed bit . Many a captain's tranquil thought Lay upon its reassuring presence, That it will always be there, sought To bring out a smile in affirmance. Be it a Godly ray or Ghostly wrath Be it a pirate crew or a friendly ship, The lighthouse to each shows its path, Saluting each one with a welcome blip. Tumultuous thoughts of fear it dispels, A direction to wayward life it does lend, The serene watchtower to me compels To love all enemies and make amends. ----- peace to all ----- Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Suddy....wow!! This is one of those poems that has floooow... (and you know how I am stuck on that!) Hey - do you ever post in Critical? This, if you want suggestions on it, might be a good one for there. You could ask one of the Open Mods to move it for you if you felt inclined to do that  K |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful imagery Sudhir! I see this lovely picture you've penned in my mind's eye ... blinking softly and lighting the way for all. Wonderful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
i gotta' hand it to ya' Sudhir ... you never shy away from the most difficult of subject matter or rhyming schemes ... vocabulary in this one must have been tough (i know i would have had trouble with it) ... nice work ... My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Sudhir-I loved your words and felt your imagery. I think I would nominate this one for the book! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
An awesome look at the light to guide us home...you have a rare talent my friend and we are lucky to have you here to share with us! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kamla, The wow is just so WOW... thanks (thinking about critical... need some guts for that...  )Kit, Thanks for reading and for your so very encouraging words... MA Miller, Your appreciation is very helpful ... Thanks Gemini, Book... hmmmm may be the next passions book then ... for now, the book's quite full... Thanks for your kind support... Butterflies~ and I am fortunate to have excellent friends like you here... and a lot of them exist here... for their continuing support... Thanks a mighty lot Regards to all, Sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 07-24-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
back to the top for this one  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Your gentle soul brings peace to all it touches with your words. Thats it ...Sudhir...the Passions lighthouse. Great read and wonderful imagery. |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Sudhir, what can I say except excellent. I happen to love lighthouses and you have painted a beautiful picture for me. Thanks, Juls |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Jeffery, I might be spinning now on the top... Thanks  Mark, Thats something HUGE that you just said... I am not sure I deserve that place... Thanks for everything... Juliet, I am glad that I could paint the picture... Thanks... regards, sudhir |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You do it all...and you do it so well... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Sudhir, Most excellent my friend. The lighthouse and what it represents has always been admired by me. You captured it very well and so your art is therefore admired by me as well. I just saw "The Perfect Storm," over the weekend and I'm sure they wished they could find a lighthouse. Very peacful ending, and I liked this one alot, keep it up. jason  Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karilea, Thats a BIG compliment... thanks... I only try my best... Jacman, I am honoured to know that you liked it... Thanks a lot. regards, sudhir |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Sudhir~ This is such a lovely, thoughtful piece. I'm so pleased to have found my way through your words of beckon. 'Tumultuous thoughts of fear it dispels, A direction to wayward life it does lend, The serene watchtower to me compels To love all enemies and make amends.' Thank you for sharing such quiet beauty. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WOW, marge, my friend... Thank you so very much... regards, sudhir |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hi Sudhir, just popping by and wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed reading your eloquent poem... *~coco~* [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 07-15-2001).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
What a wise, truthful, heartfelt poem, your talent amazes me Melissa~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Coco, melissa, Thanks so very much... You are very kind... Regards, Sudhir |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love lighthouses...just a beautiful write! |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
Well, Sudhir, I like the half-rhymes and if it wasn't for that, there would have been a rhyme scheme of ABAB CDCD EFEF GHGH IJIJ KLKL, nonetheless, it does work. I also like the use of "affirmance" to rhyme with "presence", and in this poem it works because lighthouses themselves are rather archaic. "am a tourist not a terrorist, don't shoot, cause we are all on a journey to God" Michak |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
passing and winston, I appreciate it from the depth of my heart that you came by and left behind your kind footprints in form of words that mean a lot... Regards, Sudhir |
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