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Beth
Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 468
WA, Australia

0 posted 2000-07-19 06:58 AM

If I had you
I could say what
I feel,
If you had me
We could make
it real.

Right now we're
stuck in a curse,
Its not even helping
writting this verse.

I dont know whats going
to come of us now,
I already know whats going
to happen somehow.

You know this child belongs
to you,
Deep down,
You know it too.

But, my love, I cant make
you stay,
I can only watch
As you slip away.

Please return back to us,
We need to talk,
Theres things to discuss.

You know I love you
With all my heart,
I cant blame you
For not wanting this start.

Your young and want all things
good,
But in reality,
Your not acting the way you
should.

You need to take responsiblity
and care,
This baby needs us,
We need love to share.

Jeffrey Carter

Member Elite

since 2000-04-08

Posts 2367
State of constant confusion!

1 posted 2000-07-19 07:04 AM

I'm very much going to have to start looking for your work, so far this morning I have read two very open and honest pieces and I loved them both.

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

2 posted 2000-07-19 07:09 AM

This is a sad plea and it tears at my heart. It is written beautifully and I only hope that it is answered with a positive note.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

3 posted 2000-07-19 07:13 AM

Beth - extrememly moving content here...you write with powerful emotion.

'Its not even helping
writing this verse.'

I have felt this before, oh yes, I can identify!

K

MMoonchild
Senior Member

since 2000-07-13

Posts 1715
PA

4 posted 2000-07-19 08:08 AM

this was so honest and heartfelt..writing does help, Beth, releasing the hurt allows others to care.
~~soft hugs
Maureen

Beth
Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 468
WA, Australia

5 posted 2000-07-19 09:34 AM

~Jeffrey, Thankyou so very much. Your so kind~

~Mark, Unfortunately it was negative but, hey, life goes on. Thankyou for your reply~

~Severn, Writtings a great way to express emotions but sometimes its just not enough. Thankyou deeply for your reply~

~Maureen, Your words are very true. Thankyou for your sweet reply~

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

6 posted 2000-07-19 04:26 PM

Beth,
I have only read, I believe, one of your poems so far. If I knew that you wrote like this I would have read many more. If I can, after reading this one, I will read all that you can write. You are very good, at least to my eyes.

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

7 posted 2000-07-19 05:00 PM

Beth.....
        I also love the honesty of your
  work, and this poem is extremely tender
  and sad.

          You write beautifully!!

~~~~~Live for Today~~~~~
taste every single moment

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite

since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

8 posted 2000-07-19 05:06 PM

Beth, you write of so many very sad subjects
I wish for you a rainbow of hope, love and
beautiful things. This is raw and painful
work you have written from your heart~

Beth
Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 468
WA, Australia

9 posted 2000-07-19 11:49 PM

~Bill, Your reply has touched me. You are so very sweet. Thanks for the encouragement~

~Sunny1, Thankyou so much..I guess honesty is my best virtue. ~

~B_D_C~ Oh sometimes I wish I had that rainbow..I need something positive to happen (lol)..I guess..Oneday it will come. Thankyou~

Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite

since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

10 posted 2000-07-20 11:10 AM

My son went through the same experience ... he wished to give his newborn daughter a stable home with loving parents ... but he was left standing at the lamp post ... and I've never seen my grandaughter since.
We circle the block a thousand times ... but we can't take for granted ... the sights we'll see
very well done Beth

Rex

Trew
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Ottawa, Canada

11 posted 2000-07-20 11:52 AM

You write so openly, you convey emotion that gently touches my heart.
This is another fine example.
I hope the world finds you smiling!

Beth
Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 468
WA, Australia

12 posted 2000-07-20 12:33 PM

~Rex..My heart goes out to you deeply. Raising a child is not an easy task as I have done it alone for two years now, regardless of my situation, I hope the future looks brighter for you and you family.Thankyou for you sweet reply~

~Trew..Your reply deeply touched me. Thankyou for your kind words~

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