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Angles of His Love
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Angles of His Love |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Angles of His Love He says he’s not a poet yet sometimes he is and I know it I know it because he has touched me with some sharp truth that strings wisdom just right and the other day nonchalantly mind you he said blot your lips with my love and I had to stop for it was going to be an ordinary kiss and now he had changed it with captured words that touched my heart not kiss me baby no not him and then last night he spoke of my legs nonchalantly my knobby knees pointing and he said your legs remind me of a cello now I happen to know the cello is his favorite instrument and I couldn’t help but be struck by the vision of the sleek satin finish and the angles of his love He says he’s not a poet yet sometimes he is and I know it |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
clever martie.... a nice light hearted approach to a deeper meaning.. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Martie...... It's usually the ones who claim not to be poets that have the most poetic thoughts..... I love the way you wrote this!! (especially the part about the cello!) ~~~~~Live for Today~~~~~ taste every single moment |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie, very well done! There's a problem I have and that's trying to bring some ideas (like this one) and even issues to the fore. Being an old songwriter I miss some of the poetic avenues that can be travelled. I end up writing straight from the heart in a sort of ballad style which I have never regretted but since I have joined Passions I have tried some different styles and I find them quite exciting. Sorry to go on so...really enjoyed the read......ethome....... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Whoa ! Baby, sounds to me like he's a poet AND a musician ! Now girlfriend ... that can rock your socks off !  Hubba-hubba ! LUCKY YOU ! How cute you are ! ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Awwwwww.....isn't this sweet! Sometimes they say the darndest things, don't they?! Love it, Martie! Denise |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thanks, LR, that's exactly what it is. Thanks sunny--the cello is a beautiful instrament...what a compliment, don't you think? ethome--so glad you went on like that and that you really enjoyed the poem. Marge--he is a lover of language and music and me. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Denise--just missed you...thanks for never missing a post and for your always sweet comments. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Martie ... truth rings out from your words here ... close to the heart ... thanks |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Beautiful work Martie...the "non-poets" are sometimes the masters of poetry  Great writing~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed this Martie...thanks for the smile. Your work is always unique. Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, this is gorgeous.. and I especially loved this ... and then last night he spoke of my legs nonchalantly my knobby knees pointing and he said your legs remind me of a cello now I happen to know the cello is his favorite instrument and I couldn’t help but be struck by the vision of the sleek satin finish and the angles of his love Beautiful!! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wonderful imagery. I felt like I was sitting right next to the two of you, and yes I read real slow. Had to keep in rythm with the cello you know. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You do it to me everytime...enjoyed this greatly....and he sounds like a wonderful guy. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I'm sorry, I am having trouble replying to all of you, my xxxxx computer keeps acting up. I wrote replies to everyone and then lost it to a blank screen, so I'm just going to say thank you for the wonderful comments that you made. I appreciate you reading and replying to this poem. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie, This was really nice, something a little different with the cello and knees. H'mmm, very nicely done. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Martie, He was a poet after all!! This was great writing. I enjoyed it very much. You are very lucky to have found him. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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