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Upon the Hour of Twilight
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Upon the Hour of Twilight |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Upon the Hour of TwilightUpon the hour of twilight we meet as lovers may along the path that leads into the dark before the day Upon the hour of twilight with fresh and fragrant hair emerging from a daylong sleep I dress to find you there Upon the hour of twilight a gasp when we embrace we dance beneath the rising moon and bathe within its grace Upon the hour of twilight we ache for minutes more for darkling's drape to stay the sky o'er love's forbidden floor Upon the hour of twilight as parting's kiss enthralls we memorize each other's touch til next the twilight falls Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Remind me of the old Platters song, "Twilight Time." Beautifully done and so free flowing, I loved the whole piece very much! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--I am so glad to see you posting...this poem so captures the flow that makes your poetry so beautifully you. Lovely! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Exquisite, As so many of your poems are. This is just beautiful, Claire Liz |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Upon the hour of twilight a gasp when we embrace we dance beneath the rising moon and bathe within its grace Upon the hour of twilight we ache for minutes more for darkling's drape to stay the sky o'er love's forbidden floor Upon the hour of twilight as parting's kiss enthralls we memorize each other's touch til next the twilight falls ================ ahhhhh this is enchanting my dear poet.. so lovely to see you here today  such a serene and sensual picture you paint here in this gem... perfect C, always... take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Claire, a truely beautiful poem. the plot of our life sweats in the dark like a face the mystery of childbirth, of childhood itself grave visitations what is it that calls to us?" p |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
A lovely interlude MM.. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
ethome, Martie, Liz, Janet Marie, Brian, Local Rebel ~ Thank you each for reading and offering your kind comments. Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ Exquisite - exquisite - exquisite ! 'for darkling's drape to stay the sky' 'til next the twilight falls' Doesn't get much prettier than these thoughts. Hope things are good for you, my friend. Love to you ~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Such a gem you have here, Meadowmuse..the darkness and the sensuality and your gorgeous choice of words makes for a wonderful piece of work!  *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Fantastic. For the rest just look in your thesaurus. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, I'm always amazed at how your writing can take my breath away. . . reading your poems is like walking in a dream. . . this, my friend, is no exception. . . Simply wonderful. . . --------------------------------------------------------- < !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 07-18-2000).] |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
meadowmuse ... this is an outstanding poem ... classy indeed ... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Marge, Krista, Prometheus, Sven, MA Miller ~ sincere thanks to each of you for your kind commentary. Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
your words just swept me off my feet! ah...enchanting!! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Meadowmuse, My goodness, I don't know what else to say. To have someone that can write like this would be heavenly. Wow, what a response I had when I read this poem. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Meadowmuse this poem is full of tenderness and the beauty of a new love. "A gasp when we embrace. We ache for minutes more. As parting's kiss enthralls we memorize each others touch til next the twilight falls." Really loved these lines...want to experience them...for a lifetime...James |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
how true this speaks, the memory of each others touch can be so beautiful and so painful, brought back some good memories for me claire, thank you |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is so beautiful, your imagery was magic I truly enjoyed this piece from you~ |
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jefsand Junior Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 18 |
Very nice, you wrote a thousand words! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, So tender yet mysterious to only meet in the twilight. This was full of wonderful images. Nice writing!! Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
wonderful thoughts Claire ... Twilight is such a magical moment and you've managed to enhance the spell |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you all for letting me know you enjoyed reading this piece. You folks are so kind. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
In every word one feels the poets softened touch One feels and hopes for so much Enchantingly and so full of sentimence One can see and feel them, there in the darkness where they dance This poem is very sweet and so well done Loved it. I think it should be also in the book, or? L & S P The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Helmut, thank you for your tender, poetic encouragement. L. and S. P. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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